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New Bedlam Rejected by the scrapheap: here he is, my Frankenstein who, in that word, appears as bodily as real. He read that what is written here’s not life and saw himself, but more and less substantial than that. Just like the word that flicks the switch that lights the words for dungeon bars: it’s on, but does he feel the word for better or for worse? It’s clear his dungeon locks upon another’s word, whose other words have thrown away the key. So now he sees the words that are the bars of this New Bedlam: Frank was made by these - all gutted, spliced, and tissuey with former human life - to follow no tradition but the monstrous and the pure. With all these monstrous words, these feeble words, these words in here for bending bars of words out there, these words that are the bondage of the earth, without compelling reason, and without, much finer still, one word of pity, he makes inhuman strain to find the pristine word to part these bars for long enough for humans to pass through and leave this wordy Bedlam far behind. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2005-12-01 14:45:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mark,
Your poem starts out in a tiny cell and ends up all over the world.
You'd better watch out, I think I see some very stringy drippings over there
in the corner and definately hear sirens, signaling that very soon the word police
will be cordoning off this area.
Sorry , but I guess you can tell that I kinda get into this one.
Maybe Frank would be happier if he finds the word switch
that will change his name to Jake or Drew.
I hear those are way more popular words that might be
even bigger switch flippers. But that's just a suggestion
OK, I'm sorry again because I can't seem to give you a serious comment.
But I did enjoy this way of saying the whole world is crazy
and words are what it's all about.
BTW, tissuey? ewwww
Every one seems to be clamoring about wanting more critiques, so I
thought I would teach them a lesson. One of those better be careful what
you ask for kind of things. lololol
Thanks for posting I enjoed this one!
My Best,
Jennifer