This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2005-12-03 04:49:58 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Of what there is of life that cannot find a home

Of what there is of life that cannot find a home In life itself, I call the part that does not stick In words or grand philosophies, which yet inscribes Its glories in the views it offers me. Old Soul, For you I will prepare a place that outlasts time, A branch on which your fleeting deeps may roost awhile And see the mirror where you find yourself, and me.  Here find agreement in our cause and sep’rate paths, That also are agreed, for you are deathless and Your restless, ageless ache finds mortal echo here.  Go forth, and know I’m also forth away from ties To permanence: the turning page will fell this branch As if it neither was nor ever should have been, Yet it will grow anew when mortal eyes return.

Copyright © December 2005 Mark Andrew Hislop


This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-01-03 00:22:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94872
Mark, I truly like and respect the work you've done on this one. Old soul, yes a place to rest for a bit until time to move on and once again be quiet until rebirth. I don't know how you feel on the subject of reincarnation, this to me appears to speak of it and a thousand other things that come with. Old souls, yes they exist, do we recognize them and the gifts of wisdom they have to offer--sometimes and then again sometimes not. Is this where poems come from, a muse-Old soul? OK, I guess I'm rambling, just very tired from all the night watches I've had to do lately...this offering of yours gave me a moments respite, so I must thank you for the interlude and for a comfortable easy read. Best always, Lora


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-12-31 18:45:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.86667
Mark, This feels like a lost soul, not knowing which end is up/or down, you're turned around. You feel no place is your home your all alone. I know the feeling again... Sometimes we feel like nothing cause we don't have the 'something' called love. There's a safe place when we're loved. Love makes us strong. We're empty without it. To guarantee you always have it, you love yourself. Noone in your life is more worthy. This poem flows wonderfully alomg. I like this alot. It's pertains to all who wish their lives to have balance and foremost 'value'. great job, loved: A branch on which your fleeting deeps may roost awhile And see the mirror where you find yourself, and me.[the eeeeeeeeeee's] Here find agreement in our cause and sep’rate paths, That also are agreed, for you are deathless and [the less's] Your restless, ageless ache finds mortal echo here. Go forth, and know I’m also forth away from ties [the forth's] love this! dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-12-16 11:41:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61538
This is a philosophy that I espouse. I believe that our atoms (of the body)never get lost. We incorporate each one from time immemorial. I had an arguement once with a poet (my nemesis) and she basically called me an idiot for thinking that we may also carry the earmarks of Hitler! So yes, I will go forth into that darkness and hopefully.... Your title was very intruiging and it did find a home...my home... The body certainly held my interest as well.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2005-12-08 21:08:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Poetically, I can find nothing at which to pick. Emotionally, I am reminded of the shifting sands on which I tread. Having the Christmas Holiday around the corner, I wish that I'd done some things differently. I know from where this sentiment comes. Mine's a trash barrel burning old court documents. I still have a box or two to go. Let me know if you need a cardboard box. tom
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2005-12-05 09:11:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
I enjoyed your piece with the use of old english wording. You thought is delivered througout this poetic presentation. Your words flow nicely and have depth. This is a wonderful piece and wouldn't change anything with it. Your ending brings me back to the main concept when mortal eyes return. Thanks so much for sharing.
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