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This Poem was Submitted By: stephen g skipper On Date: 2005-12-06 17:30:43 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Inner Me

Midnight is calling I sleep alone tonight Who am I really? Tortured mind, poetic soul Lover, father, fool! Midnight is calling Across the beach tonight Gross misshapen finger pressed Hard against pursed lips Society’s need for silence! Midnight is calling To my conscience tonight Will I stand For what I know is right Or sit and watch another’s plight? Midnight is calling To my soul tonight Will I answer him, bravely With the voice of my Inner Me? I think not! Midnight is calling I’m so scared tonight Looking into your eyes I don’t see me as I am And I thank God for that!

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-12-31 15:05:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71875
Oh Stephen. Why so disparaging? You are seeing your soul through her eyes. Everything will be okay. There is nothing ever to be afraid of. You set your own limits...set them free. Good verse here. Well laid out and I like the format. Your title certainly drew me in and gave me some insight into you. Thanks.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-12-17 18:12:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Stephen, I know what you mean....... We never measure up to what we think we should be. We always fall short of the mark! We could be much more but my God the effort. And there's a thousand reasons why not. I love the word 'fool'...We are that! I'm as foolish as one could be. This is a soul searching piece. Enjoy the easy wording and sincerity! Happy holidays dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-12-17 15:01:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Steve, Excellent visual presentation, really adds emphasis and seperation. I will not comment on structure, form etc., I'll leave that to others more versed than I. Yes, it is most difficult at times to look within and often we do not particularly care for what we find and are relieved if what we know to be the true us is not mirrored for us to see. Ah, but the only person we truly decieve is ourselves, by looking in we begin to awaken, and thus, in doing so we have to face our truths in order to deal with them. You have done this beautifully in this offering...Kudos, no questions here, and I wouldn't change a thing. Warmest always, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-12-10 11:48:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Stephen, Nice to find another one from you. This delves deep to the core of identity and taking a stand. Most of us shrink away from doing so.....in search of the more acceptable comfort zones in life. I'm not sure what the significance of 'midnight is calling' is to this piece. Does it denote the hour or point of reckoning? You could actually cut down on these couplets. This will give the more important matter greater impact. I like your ending and the concept is good....a little more punch perhaps....and that's why we poets never really finish our work. Take care, Duane.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2005-12-07 15:49:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Like how you use a refrain in this piece and mask the feelings within. You have made the reader look into their own eyes to see what remains there is it something we would like to see? Well done enjoyed reading this.

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