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This Poem was Submitted By: stephen g skipper On Date: 2005-12-14 17:38:15 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Lazarus The Luthier

Awaken Gentle artisan Sojourn no more In the sombre houses of the dead Awaken Master craftsman The people are in dire need Of your artistry Awaken Time-served traveller Recent party to the orchestrations Of the heavenly host Awaken Fellow carpenter Make for me a guitar From the tree of life Awaken Faithful friend Re-produce an angelic instrument So I can perform the living sound of love Awaken Seeker of perfection Help me compose a tune That transcends tangled tongues Hail and welcome Be seated at my table Share my bread and drink your fill Blessed the music maker

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-01-04 12:23:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.31034
Stephen like the flow from each stanza to the next and the thought that moved with it. Your use of words makes this readable by almost anyone so the selection is just right you have not removed the average reader. Like the tones of this piece. My favorite parts are: Awaken Fellow carpenter Make for me a guitar From the tree of life and Awaken Seeker of perfection Help me compose a tune That transcends tangled tongues Also like how you use Awaken then Welcome him with Hail. Well done.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-12-24 15:35:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Stephen, This is a prayer..asking Jesus/carpenter to show you the way. I'd use into in the first stanza. The tree of life is nice. Help me compose a tune That transcends tangled tongues[right on/we speak forked tongue too.] good job/good thoughts Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-12-15 18:07:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61538
I did have to find out who Luthier was...interesting that you put Lazurus together with him and wound this tale of a music maker. You held my interest with this one. Thanks for posting and seasons greetings to you.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-12-14 22:59:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Stephen, This is so lyrical that it all but sings. Sound structure, good use of verbiage, thouroughly thought out. After reading this I can honestly say, you should never doubt you talent (although I know you will), IMO this is one of your finest. Bravo! Warmest always, Lora

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