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Invitation To Winter

Winter you have tipped your dark hat Towards the trees leaving  Black lace within my view A triple shiver as I awake First blush of morning The coziness of my gown  Dulls my sensitivity to your sensation And feels snug against your icy presence Encircling the world around me Winter you are biting yet enchanting Stream of shorter days Where daydreams have a place To be invented making whims of my  Dreamers soul feel gracious That your season is now not only dreary But a spell cast for those who Scheme to play in the wintry zone Winter you calm me down in the evening Allowing angels to hasten my slip into Another place to dream again with A feverish ward against anything as  Cold as you are or dark as your black lace Guarded by the defender of my being Throughout the eve then morning brews Another tip of your serene hospitality

Copyright © December 2005 DeniMari Z.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-01-06 08:03:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.37500
Your appreciation of a wintery day looking at the positive side of what it brings the writer. We can find warmth within when its cold outside, we can find that solitude can be a joy. So many things a wintery day and night can bring. The Hot spiced tea, hot chocolate, baking, and snuggling while watching TV. These are the things you remind me of with this piece. You also show me the playfulness outside and joy a snow can bring. I like this poem because you make this reader think upon the joy of a wintery day. I like your three stanza approach each with it own positive thought. Well done and a joy to read. Thanks for sharing.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie Spicer On Date: 2005-12-29 09:47:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi DeniMari, Some dread the thought of winter coming once again, but this poem gives a new element of wonder to how we can observe it. I love the utilization of “black lace within my view.” I sit here at the ocean and it does appear as “black lace”, enchanting, with slight visibility at the early morning view. As well, as I arise to meet the cool air, the clothing I have on does limit my bare skin from warmth meeting the fresh coolness of the morning. (love “dulls my sensitivity to your sensation”. What a wonderful play on words.) I had never truly looked at winter as enchanting but as I read this, I remember all the times I awoke as a small girl and stared out the window and all the snow, the amazing snowflakes falling, and the peacefulness of quiet. (Must have been on some of my “reflective times”.) Daydreams fill my soul and the spell has been cast. You give such reverence for this season that it give a new meaning to this time. Thank you for sharing your amazing words and thoughts in order to re-refresh my mind as to why we have the different seasons of the year, and we can admire each for their own exquisiteness. Very well written and it touched my heart. Hugs, Debbie
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-12-24 14:58:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi, [trees leaving Black lace within my view] Your font is lacy like the trees limbs leafless. It's pretty but a bit difficult with 's'. I never thought of winter as serene hospitality but maybe so. A warm fire, friends gathered. Time to think/dream and go within! Maybe a time to reinvent yourself. Gain a new perspective against the darkness. Your poem leaves room to imagine anything..... I like it. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-12-20 18:04:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DeniMari, Very interesting, wonderfully discriptive verbiage, and for the most part flows well. Winter you have tipped your dark hat Towards the trees leaving Black lace within my view A triple shiver as I awake [loose the "A"] First blush of morning The coziness of my gown Dulls my sensitivity to your sensation And feels snug against your icy presence [loose the "and"] Encircling the world around me IMO those two changes would make your poem a bit tighter and more in keeping with the style of your write Winter you are biting yet enchanting [biting, enchanting] Stream of shorter days Where daydreams have a place To be invented making whims of my Dreamers soul feel gracious That your season is now not only dreary [drop "that"] makes it a bit clearer] But a spell cast for those who Scheme to play in the wintry zone Winter[,] you calm me down in the evening Allowing angels to hasten my slip into Another place[,] to dream again with A feverish ward against anything as [again loose the "A"] creates more emphasis] Cold as you are or dark as your black lace Guarded by the defender of my being Throughout the eve[,] then morning brews Another tip of your serene hospitality This poem is simply delicious, vibrant and alive. The few suggestions I made are only suggestions that would aid in a smoother read IMHO, however I have to tell you I really like the flavor of this since I enjoy the earths chances and the feelings they lend to us. Brava, very nice. Warmest always, Lora
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