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A void worth all the trouble Jack could talk about it with Jill, not you nor any other of his friends, his certain death, his memory that will not persist, his what’s-the-point of light time’s obliterating, bouncing white from a bondage, the bad news of a life-long headache that cannot think outside itself, the spiraling chink of a clock’s seconds that no other soul can ever watch the search for the precious apex that points from the ancestors through the ancestor you are to a void worth all the trouble to endure skin burnt by its transactions with eternity red raw on which each puff of air is an agony that leaves ontology with no further questions |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-02-07 06:16:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57143
Mark you have given a well written poem and I definately like the lenght. I do not like to see words like ontology the science, chink that I thought might be better with click for I never heard a clock go chink. These were my only areas of concern yet that is only this readers opinion. Overall a good poem. Thanks for sharing.