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Black is the knife Black is the knife that I lay in shadow, Hollow is my heart as it takes its heft: My tongue, maker of the shattered window. Ready is death and the grave is fallow, All will be received until none are left: So black the knife that I lay in shadow. How shall I tell nightshade from the mallow, What shall reveal how chaff, how grain are cleft? My tongue, maker of the shattered window. Deep blackness of daylight, onyx pillow By which my dreams, desires, all, were reft, Blackened the knife that I lay in shadow. Thundering lord with no light to follow, Of choice, by choice damned; of choice bereft, My tongue, maker of the shattered window. Soft were my eyes as I sent my arrow; Eyeless remorse, though more slow, was more deft. Black was the knife that I sped from shadow, My tongue, maker of the shattered window. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2006-03-07 10:26:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
MAH,
That's quite a line, "My tongue, maker of the shattered window." The old nominalist/realist debate howling in the veins of one of my beloved contemporaries. Or rather the mouth.
The meter seems rocky in parts, as if you wrote and posted this fast.
But I'd rather read Hislop scribble on toilet paper than about 99.9% of the stuff that's posted here and about.
MSS