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This Poem was Submitted By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2006-03-12 21:42:57 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Time

Precious for it is a gift. How does one wrap it? The only question. Packaged to loosely it soon unravels Bounded to tightly becomes limited and bruised Properly tied possibilities are endless when unwrapped life is explored How quickly it passes…

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2006-04-03 14:19:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.55000
Oh you are so right! Time? It's precious to me because I near the end...I'm almost 71. How do I make the best of it? Like one friend says...one foot in front of the other! Nice read and well thought out.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2006-04-01 08:15:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thomas, Well, Hello again! :) Seems I really like, and appreciate, your work! You seem to put so much of 'yourself' onto it. Your innermost thoughts, feelings... This is no exception. It's wonderful. The metaphor of a 'wrapped gift' is perfect. So simply stated, yet, delivers such a powerful message. Outstanding title, you never have to mention the word again through the entire poem! Definitely a profound, thought provoking write! One that needs to be contemplated thoroughly. Time, so often we take it for granted, sometimes confusing "it's" eternity with our own mortality. Then, in what seems to be an instant, it passes. No more time to make changes. So few well chosen words, so much to think about... Short, succinct, and flows so very nicely. Your pen speaks well here, my friend. I so enjoyed reading this one. Thanks for sharing. Be well, Thomas. :) Warm regards, Mary

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2006-03-19 10:45:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Tom, I really enjoyed this read! More truth could not be wrapped up into a more perfect package! The flow is nice, word choics and sounds are pleasant to the ear. And of coure the message is a good one. I'd rename it Unwrapping a Sandwich. :-) Lovely! Best, Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-03-13 13:58:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Thomas, Precious for it is a gift. How does one wrap [around]it? [around just seemed to fit] The only question. Packaged too[so]loosely it soon unravels Bounded too tightly becomes limited and bruised love this poem........your absolutely right, we waste our time/it passes too soon. you wrote very nicely. good going dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-03-12 22:29:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thomas, Your title drew me into this oh so wise a read. This is a poem I will savor and keep to read time and again. I can find no fault in it, you have spoken with such profound wisdom without hesitation or quierie, a definite for my list. As always, Lora

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