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This Poem was Submitted By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2006-04-15 16:19:13 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Physics Dream

Sun's peep has permeated through earth's nucleus, Vernal clime has reigned cockcrow; Hey, shun the baffling yore's interference! Welcome the "now's" lip-smacking dispersion. If clock ticks job well-done, Never more shall I dally away. "Time is money," my mind radiates, The saw that B. Franklin from limelight entailed. If love throbs like a pendulum, to and fro, Will convey periods of harmonic oscillation, Whence replete glee enlivens heyday, Ever quintessence of Jubilee. If science and virtue are packed into armored quanta, Physics dream would zip towards blackhole, Yon loomed bolts of myriad chances That spring up new horizons. Let prayer hews the belt of ether Count on God who doesn't play dice, Einstein had it confirmed More than he had proven E=mc^2.

Additional Notes:
A poem of my teenage life

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-04-21 15:36:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57143
Jordan, What a wild scientific ride, so colorful, well thought out and extremely perceptive for a teen. I see you were far ahead of the mass' in thought and philosophy, anyway, your poem is delightful and above all else, yes- everything has universal laws that are followed regardless of how we wish to view them or quantify them. The titles are but things of man, essences are of spirit and often go without name. Spring viewed here still lend to renewal as all things are renewed in some form at some time. Thanks for the very unusual read and I find not nit with this and would not change a thing. Best, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: April Rose Ochinang Claessens On Date: 2006-04-20 09:38:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
hi jordan, i have enjoyed reading your poem.of course i have more to say than that.PHYSICS DREAM on the whole is a well-written poem, not like the other poems that i read in the past. i especially liked the description of sunrise on the first stanza.then i appreciate the quotation of b. franklin (though, for me you should have made use of 'benjamin franklin' to have more impact than just b. franklin, but its ok, dont worry about it.) this poem made me read between the lines. and its because of that reason that it has became my favorite among those that ive read in the past.i like poems that challenge me intellectually; poems (articles in general) that make me ask "why,where, and how" because im a person who loves to know more.definitely, this poem has made me know more than i did before. thanks jordan.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2006-04-19 08:27:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Jordan, Title: Physics Dream Your scientific training gives an unique, piquant flavor to this very original poem. I smiled all the way through your playful, spiritually vibrant stanzas. Sun's peep has permeated through earth's nucleus, Vernal clime has reigned cockcrow; Hey, shun the baffling yore's interference! Welcome the "now's" lip-smacking dispersion. The celebration of spring sings with the “Sun’s peep” and I am imagining the earth as transparent. To live in the “now’s” seems very apropos of the awakening of a new season, to be reborn with the changing of the season. I love the witty “baffling yore’s interference” allusion. If clock ticks job well-done, Never more shall I dally away. "Time is money," my mind radiates, The saw that B. Franklin from limelight entailed. It seems that the clock’s ticks imply that every second counts! (Kronos?) The narrator reminds the reader that dalliance will not achieve brilliant inventions nor make best use of the passage of time. If love throbs like a pendulum, to and fro, Will convey periods of harmonic oscillation, Whence replete glee enlivens heyday, Ever quintessence of Jubilee. I sense the idea here that the inherent rhythms of the universe, the oscillation of particles, is really an expression of love, throbbing throughout creation. It is a lovely thought, worthy of celebration (Jubilee). If science and virtue are packed into armored quanta, Physics dream would zip towards blackhole, Yon loomed bolts of myriad chances That spring up new horizons. Wow! The stanza above is packed with ideas, of quantum physics, of probable universes (myriad chances) and constantly emerging “new horizons.” Your “Yon loomed bolts” is wonderfully assonant and original. Let prayer (hew) the belt of ether Count on God who doesn't play dice, Einstein had it confirmed More than he had proven E=mc^2. You close with the reference to Einstein’s statement about God. And imply that prayer is real and affects “the belt of ether.” This is stunning and thought-provoking! Playful yet profound, Jordan. I enjoyed this immensely. Fresh, lively and uplifting. My best always, Joanne (AKA “Auntie”)

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-04-18 13:33:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57143
Hi Jordan...you might have been a teenager when you wrote this but it is indicative of the talent you now own. I know nothing about Einstein so the equation at the end is lost on me. However, I do remember Franklin's saw! This poem is packed full of wonderful words and profound messages....way beyond a teen's years. Thanks for posting this....I would have been impressed if you wrote it at any age! well done. Peace...Marilyn

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