This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-07-04 17:47:10 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Silkiness Of Her I hear sighs from the breezes in the trees.
Zigzagging their way through the bough's green leaves.
I see the rhythm of the swaying high.
I know the scent of a floral spiced sky.
I love the verdure of born again plants
they speak to me of seed and earth romance.
I treasure gardens and the rose thereof
indicative of their creator's love.
Daisies, Asters, Dahlias, and Columbine,
thick leafy bases hold the grand design.
Soaring high birds with their sing song quaver
taste as I, summer's honeyed smooth flavor.
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Copyright © July 2006 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2006-08-06 09:09:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, this is indeed a treat to be savored. You appeal to all the senses with this beautiful write. One can 'hear' the breeze rushing through the trees, 'smell' the scent of the wildflowers in the air, 'see' the grasses and flowers dancing in the breeze, and you even got 'taste' in there in the last line. This one has to be my favorite, too. "...taste as I, the honeyed smooth flavor..." Perfection! So rich and vivid in i
all its imagery. You paint such glorious pictures in the mind with this write. I so enjoyed this wonderful piece, in all its glory. Thanks for shring this treat with all of us. Well penned, indeed. Kudos!
Warmly,
Mary
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2006-07-14 11:43:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena--An intoxicating metaphoric write about mother nature.
These "fresh/unique" rhyming quatrains with outstanding vivid
phrases of seasonal nuances 'speak' summer. Scribe's enthralling
language carry's "The Silkiness Of Her"/theme quite well. Not
only does the combination of verbiage and end rhymes create mind
pictures, but produce sonorous tones. Thanks for something for all
the senses. No nits to pick. teafor2
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-07-10 21:20:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena,
What a pleasant surprise to find this delightful earth song, natures hypnotic lushness. You've fed all the senses with your vivid imagery. The cadence is perfect to me, the rhyme is soft an easy not forced, to me this reads like a sonnet yet I know not the count or lay of such things only that this poem of yours is of an accomplished writer who has shared her perceptions, observations and feelings with us in this well penned work. I can find no nit and to you, two roses my friend.
wahdo,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-07-08 09:02:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi D....it won't surprise you that this poem sings to me! I write so much about the wonders of nature and always enjoy poems like this. I love your word choices and the way you have phrased each line.......sighs from the breezes in the trees....is wonderful and creates a perfect image of trees gently swaying in the light breeze. also....a floral spiced sky...is brilliant. Your rhyming is great as it moves along with ease from one line to the next....I love this...well done.
blessings...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-07-05 11:47:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Awesome title, Dellena. That one really drew me in. Your design is simple with each line rhyming. It gives it a song-like feel.
I hear sighs from the breezes in the trees. (that's really good!)
Zigzagging their way (hard to picture-could they be wafting, or lofting or something?)
seed and earth romance-cool concept! earthly romance, earth's romance
I treasure gardens and the rose thereof I really like these lines too.
indicative of their creator's love.
Overall, I'd say you have written a lovely poem. Nice work!
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