This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2006-07-15 21:38:05 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Knocks made upon doors too thick entry is not granted     Investment of time where dew rusts metal together. Shadows arch into realness that horror alone senses   You have not come far enough to find the hope,            Only that truth was never companion to your                                                dreams. In fearing to know, false shelters do not protect you                                        from what comes. And what comes will take all you know, showing         That you did not mean the kindness you offered, But hid behind it for want of courage to step into the breach                  Where something different could be had. 

Copyright © July 2006 James C. Horak

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-07-17 08:48:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91667
A fine collection of enlightened philosophy's. Nice work! My problem with reading this is that the punctuation throws me off. Knocks made upon doors too thick (;) entry is not granted. horror alone senses (.) Only that truth (why cap 'only'?) Evey line in the last verse is capped too. I just think that some of those are out of place. Every writer has his own opinion about punctuation, but then so does every reader. There are times when it is necessary to be strict and rigid in those rules, and times when it is totally inapropriate. I leave that up to you, but wanted you to know how it has effected my read of this work. Other than that, it's a fine piece of work! You have poked about in little spoken truth's, and given me new things to ponder. I like it.

This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2006-07-16 12:26:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Truth comes in many forms. My father used to say little truths were white lies. Who knows? My truth may not be your truth. That you did not mean the kindness you offered....that is a very telling line. Only from your viewpoint perhaps. Well said from your view but one must present both sides...and then there may not be answers or truths. So yes, the title is very appropriate. Maybe time will affect the situation...maybe not.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-07-16 00:37:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, You are so philisophical. You do so much soul searching. It is good and bad. Sometimes we're pretty hard on ourselves! We are all fallible. You are most honorable in your quest. It makes me most pleased to know you. It's really wonderful to experience another in the stages of growth. Too many of us get stuck and quit advancing, thinking we've learned it all! But as you know its unending. I love your sharing of yourself. You're a sweet-heart. And you've hidden it so well. I like what you bring forth! You are inspirational to me. Thank you, dellena
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