This Poem was Submitted By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2006-08-08 18:14:52 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Longing

~ As I sit curled up on the couch, you slide in next to me. Oh so close to me, pressing your body next to mine feeling its warmth radiating, soothing. I lean over to touch you, feel you. The casual curve of your back, slender statuesque neck, and smooth contour of your face next to mine. Soft satiny hair faintly brushes bare skin. You slowly lean over gently pushing your face to my neck, flippantly fooling around with your teasing tongue. Tantalizing little oscillations  up and down, finding your way to my ear. In and out, again and again, come gentle flicks of the tongue. Butterfly kisses. Then softly, sweetly, gently nibbling naked lobes. I turn to look at you. Your soft brown eyes, profound pools of dark amber, reflect my eyes as you stare into the deepest depths of my heart. Pleading,  yearning,  begging, until I can no longer resist you. Finally,  I turn and shout ~ "Will somebody PLEASE let the dog out?!" ~

Copyright © August 2006 Mary J Coffman

Additional Notes:
Hehehehehehehe.......for my fuzzy furry kids! :)


This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-08-12 11:43:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mary, So delightful, fun and yep; you led us down the path. This was the type of read you just couldn't put down till finished, had to know the ending even if one suspected where you were headed. Love the ending, I think I live in your house.....LOL...I wouldn't change a thing, it is refreshing and candy for the spirit. Warmest always, Lora


This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2006-08-09 21:59:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mary--Alluring, teasing, enrapturing and ice-water-dashing write (smile). I fell for this inference of "making out," hook line and sinker. Moreover, I personally feel I wasn't the only reader com- pletely fooled by scribe's enticing offer. Who can blame any honest reviewer for being mislead until the very last outstanding twist/ turn ending for this enthralling work. A unique and witty personi- fication. No nits to pick. TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2006-08-09 15:51:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Mary, This is great - love the twist - clearly unexpected - just a wonderful interjection of humor. Great spirit lifter - enjoyed the slow pace of each separate line - details that may have been the beginning of a couple making love - then too funny - let the dog out. There is nothing I would change in this, I've enjoyed it exactly the way you wrote it. Good luck, Denimari
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-08-08 20:10:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Mary...this poem is so sexy and sensual and I was really into it...and then...you threw cold water on me! What a gem of a poem...I am still laughing. I love the way you build up momentum with every line and have your audiance almost panting and anticipating the ending, which we know is bound to be breath taking. Very clever and innovative...I love it! Blessings....Marilyn
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