This Poem was Submitted By: Debbie Spicer On Date: 2006-08-17 11:48:45 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Opposing Attorneys

With PTSD, there are good and bad days And I am punished for both of them. The attorneys against me think I am fine But they have no idea what bad days are like. Being monitored by the ones critical of me Believe I am capable of each day being bliss And when I submit a poem, they believe I am healed I would love for them to truly understand. This is used against me To submit a poem at my favorite site How the stigma of this disease Is not understood to its fullest I have been limited in writing To express my inner most thoughts Making the progress a good one Only because they see it as a mark of wellness. They continue to use this against me And I can’t wait until their watch ia over Then I can express my poetry Fully and without constriction. The darkness they have brought me  Is overwheming and confining If only they would leave me alone I could progess to my healing. I have found our justice system Unfair and dishonest How sad and disheartning For I believed they cared.

Copyright © August 2006 Debbie Spicer

Additional Notes:
For Tamera, the attorney who holds poetry against me.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2006-09-04 11:48:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
oh my God Debbie...I had no idea ..this is terrible to be judged by the ignorant and thusly treated unfairly. To write is to be you, nothing to do with the problem, because of what you have been through and what it has felt within you is the reason you wrote and write in the first place..I am so saddened to think that you are so left in darkness..even this is turned against you..unbelieveable!! ((((hugs))))...are you sure they do really care..or are capable..I am not! love ya..nancy

This Poem was Critiqued By: G. Donald Cribbs On Date: 2006-08-30 13:04:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Debbie, I see this poem has struck a chord here at TPL. Perhaps it has much to do with the falling out of recent months. I have only recently returned here myself, finding it very quiet, and lonely. I am sorry to have missed this poem until now. It must have sailed down the point list and I do try to stick to the top of the list and work my way down. No offense to you. I would hate to have a poem so written as you did for Tamera. Again, no offense to you. As for the whole, I think it was a bit of a statement, rather bold and straightforward. Perhaps too much for this site. I don't know where you're at as a writer, but my hope is to get HONEST critiques and help to improve my writing so it's better, not just okay writing, not just passable. if you're interested, another site you might consider is (the critical poet dot com). I just joined there, and am getting much more helpful advice rather than a bunch of "kissing up," if you know what I mean. Thank you for sharing this poem, and don't miss the spelling/typo in stanza 5, line 2: watch is over, not "watch ia over." If it were me, I might have put that there to test the critiquer on whether they were "planting posterior kisses" or if they truly were "Critiquing" my poem, but that's just me. Warm regards, Don
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2006-08-19 03:14:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
You can tell Tamara for me to look into the soldier's minds that return from the battlefront. Stress disorders as you well know were once known as "shell shock" in the army. Your piece is real. Your feelings are real You write very intimately about your problem and are willing to share those inner thoughts. You are strong and brave. Tell Tamara to piss up a rope. She should spend some time reading up on stress orders then go and volunteer in a Veteran's hospital or spend time on a psych unit.But then you must excuse her for she is the opposing lawyer and that is her job isn't it. to put you down and belittle what you are going through. Take care my friend.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-08-18 15:09:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Debbie, How heart wrenching and so true. I can only sympathize with your well penned plight, so little is left you with your disease and what small semblance of pleasure/normalacy, they want to steal that also. Would it in my powers be to fix your situation I would, however know this, you have a family here and we are all here for you...prayers coming your way. warmest, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-08-17 14:41:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Debbie....What a treat to see you at the top of my list today! However, this piece is so gut wrenching and I cannot understand why anyone would think one or two poems could heal a trauma such has you have suffered. It has been so long since you have been here and much has happend since then to TPL and we are just hanging on by a very thin thread. So seeing one of my favorite poets show up delighted me. I had no idea you are suffering words would be hollow at this point. But I want you to know I feel sad for you and I will pray for you. This poem is very well have limned your emotions like the pro that you are. I feel your anger, pathos, depression, and all those things that make us feel bad when we experience them. To me poetry has a deffinite cathartic effect and I hope it does for you too. Keep writing and keep living...I'm counting on it. Love....Marilyn
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