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Rapping Time marches to the drums beat of millions of passing seconds. Moments are straining to exist in the now but are over before barely created. Trying to snare, save, and use, a second, a minute, or an hour, are defeated. Time never pauses; its intervals set, to our regret, we have no power upon the hour. With a grim jaw line holding bold and firm, we must adapt to the rap of progression. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-10-24 22:05:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Cool! I like this. That's a great title for it. I can't offer much as far as changes go. I like the uneven 'drumbeats' and the catch phrases. I like the way some of your rhymes tumble over each other-even in mid sentence! Great job. I really like this one alot.