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Lila Dressed in purple satin, trimmed in white lace; Lila sat up on the dusty toy store shelf taking up little space. Long dark curls framing an angelic porcelain face. December fifteenth and she was still there As the door of the toy store opened blowing in cold arctic air. The shopper left smiling with a small teddy bear. December 20th was a very special day. Mr. James stopped in and took Lila away. December 22nd and Lila sat in a box wrapped in paper with silvery bows. Where is Lila going? No one knows. Cindy James, almost eight was sitting on her bed. Wishing that Santa would bring her what he had said. "A beautiful doll, a friend for all time, Someone to watch over her at night, Then play with her the fist glimpse of morning light." December 24th, Cindy James went to bed, after saying her prayers She looked up and said, "Merry Christmas dear Lord, May all of your wishes come true, thank you for everything and all that you do." December 25th, Christmas Day, Cindy opened up a very special box and didn't know what to say. Santa had kept his promise, Lila was a beautiful doll Dressed in purple satin, trimmed in white lace, Cindy beamed with joy. Oh what a wonderful Christmas it was. Oh what a wonderful toy. |
Additional Notes:
* Wrote this years ago, when I was more in to, writing short stories & poems for children. I used to make them up for my kids - as bedtime stories. Thought I'd post this - and see what the critics say, regardless if it's geared to the younger set, I imagine you all would have some helpful hints.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-01-07 20:15:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
DeniMari,
This appears to me a story lived. A good little girl getting from her parents a
wish come true. You were blessed with a good home where wishes were possible.
That is the message in the story. How much greater can that be?
Bless you and your family...
Dellena