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This Poem was Submitted By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2006-12-07 11:16:45 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Jewel

Our Mother Earth Daughter of the Universe Sparkling jewel of life Sapphire set in velvet sky So infinitely precious

Additional Notes:
This is a little tanka poem, haven't written one for awhile but I keep coming back to these form poetry styles. Tanka..poem, no rhyming, 5 lines, meter 5,7,5,7,7.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2007-01-04 20:40:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.92857
Hi, Nancy. I like this little ditty. It's perfect as to meter. I wonder why you chose saphire? blue azure? Just a thought. Thanks for sharing! Ellen

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-12-29 00:15:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nancy, I love our Mother Earth, being daughter of the universe, since the sun/father and moon/grandmother. Eath's alliance with the sun has made it possible for lifes to evolve. She is the most beautiful planet with the blue sapphire sparkle of water. I'm so pleased when others value their home planet! If we could now keep her alive for the ages. lovely little tanka poem.....you are a 'teacher'. thank you. dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie Spicer On Date: 2006-12-27 22:11:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
This tanka is very special to me. Sapphire is my birthstone and you are my very special friend who didn't know this was a intimate month for me. You take nature to the very element it is, all within the heart, a sparking light that many can not see, the velvet sky for those who have been mistreated or tortured and are now free, one that comes only from understanding in their hearts that Mother Earth will have her way. She is precious, all giving, yet she understands that life is a moment in ones stay here on this earth. All we experience here is momentary, yet all worthy, and the deep intense meaning of this tanka reaches everyone who wants or needs to experience it. A truly well written, to the heart, tanka, and I appreciate the inner voice of this poet. Love, Debbie

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-12-19 19:50:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nancy, This is a good one and so fitting for this time of season, lest we not forget what a wondrous place we live. Well done, bravo! Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2006-12-16 21:40:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Vision, even that of a planet as a gem among others, is best in such simple statement. Playing on the readers own frame of reference, it calls upon the same and achieves more mystery. Economy with words can be a powerful thing, demonstrated well by our red brothers. As a conjuration, your poem has its own beauty and places earth within it. And from space, the earth does have a sapphire quality. Pleasurable read, Nancy. JCH

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2006-12-16 08:23:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Nancy....so much imagery in these few well chosen words. I adore this! I especially love the third line "....sparkling jewel of life...." If seen from the heavens, this is what I would envisualize while looking at our Mother Earth. Beautifully stated. Then..."a sapphire set in velvet sky...." so much color and texture in these words. I'm a big fan of short forms, as they force the use of both imagery, and well chosen words....both of which you have achieved nicely in this piece. Well done! I so enjoyed reading this. Thanks for posting, my friend. Warmly, Mary

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2006-12-09 15:59:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Hi Nancy...I too am very fond of tanka, haiku, and my favorite cinquain. You have done an excellent job with this one. I love "sapphire set in velvet sky"...that is so lovely and I wish I had witten it first! Our earth is infinitely precious and I hate what we humans are doing to destroy it. Pollution, garbage, and the worst of all, war. This is wonderful and thanks for sharing such beautiful thougts. Blessings....Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2006-12-09 04:03:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thank you poet for posting this beauty........we better start to realize just how prescious a jewel the earth is and take better care of it for years to come......love the thought of Saphire set in velvet sky.......and how Mother Earth is the daughter of the Universe......you certainly do make your work come alive. Thanks for posting and sharing, will write soon..........God Bless, Claire

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