This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2006-12-27 19:38:52 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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My Fur Coat I'm wrapped in the elegance of animal fur
so thick of depth I feel no cold.
Worn wrap-around it displays beauty upon me.
I'm regal as it touches against my skin.
I stroke the soft silky coat repeatedly
acquiring new perspectives with each stroking.
The nap so naturally oily, smooth, soft, and warm.
I must have it with me wherever I go.
I'm in tune to the actual animal's vibration
it's grown to become the best of me.
I feel nothing but gratefulness as I cuddle
and pet my dog, proven to be, my finest friend.
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Copyright © December 2006 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2006-12-31 01:21:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena,
A little mischief here, you had me, thought of some poor slaughtered animal...LOL...though your final line puts the world right and warm once again. Thanks for a delightful unpredictable read.
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2006-12-28 22:19:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Thank you for the smile today Dellena! What a great ending. The title drew me right up next to a fire; ready to snuggle down and read. Then, I am delighted to know that this fur is alive! What a best friend indeed!
** Worn wrap-around it displays beauty upon me. **
or............Wrapped around me it displays (or graces?) its' beauty upon me.......
acquiring new perspectives with each stroking. (Thats a wonderful line)
Did you spell 'nap' wrong? knapp? Sorry I don't have a way to check that one out. It's probably right but you might check it out, just in case.
actual animal's .....hmmm...breathing instead of actual? the breath, the breathing....
I love the ending!!! Nice twist. This is a delightful poem. I'm really enjoying this. smiles to you. Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2006-12-28 14:21:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dellena, you little mischief-maker. Now, I wouldn't have thought anything
about fur skin...removed, that is, for a coat. Instead of your play upon
the stalwart senses of political correctness. Of course I write poems about
trappers baiting traps with live bait. And, still, I love animals, critters
of all sorts and children. Even children critters.
Do you know, that as a tribute to the breed, the Japanese skin their Akitas
when they die and put the pelt on the wall? Doesn't hurt them a bit.
Still, your poem put-on (pun intended) is the best of all. Hope Rachel didn't
get to the last line.
Very good free verse structure.
JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2006-12-27 22:09:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Your best friend sounds wonderful and I just love the way you wrote this as if you were actually wrapped in some expensive piece of garment.............makes me think of my cat, Snowball who loves to cuddle and when I sit on the couch to knit he sits on the back of the couch and wraps himself around my neck........tail on one side, his face purring on the other and the fluffy middle that keeps me warm........animals, no matter what breed are indeed the best of friends. Perhaps you will bring forth more poetry concerning your finest friend........thanks for posting, God Bless, Claire
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