This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-01-05 06:06:01 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Boy Blithe and The Krebs Cycle

My big brother is a genius...he says I'm one too...                                 I don't know. An old possum ambling around, white faced from               age   shot dead from lack of charity                         We buried this morning. Brother says it's like the way so many die,                    again, no charity...and I try                        but I don't know. He made a correction to the Krebs Cycle,                                       you know. Kinda perfected now, it has clarity so it                                    shows that. How we build protein, the whole thing.     And now it shows why we sometimes don't                                     so well...                    and get cancer. Brother says Dr. Krebs had a brother like me               found the cure...cause the cause                                  was so clear. And it works. But we still bury so many he says                     cause of so little charity.
Copyright © January 2007 James C. Horak

Additional Notes:
I've started a little series of poems related around a theme taken from the title of my poem, If It Can Not Be Known to A Child Can It Be True? This is one. If well taken, there will be another.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2007-01-22 11:20:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81818
Well, James. This one, like the other, saves it's punch for the ending. Kinda perfected now, it has clarity so it shows that.....Could this line be 'fixed? ending the line with 'that' is almost like not ending it at all. Of course, I am reading from the perspective of a simple mind, and one not versed in the specifics of style. But, that's my thought. Other than that, I don't see anything that 'needs' something. I find it powerful and gentle both. I also know that there is much truth to what you have spoken! I do enjoy this series you are working on. Looking forward to more, Ellen

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-01-14 16:09:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, an interesting mixture of innocence, biology and philosophy. I am captured by the possum (Krebs will wait), reinforcement of the truth of charity, or proponent for gun control? I guess I like it that you placed it in the same series as the foundations of life's cycles and all; Kreb's or more, and of course, these cycles have little effect on genius, that is a function more of genetics and the mothers intrauterine care. Guess that is why both brothers might be genius; at least older brother believes so. Leaves to your premise I believe, that that which may be known by a child, somehow imputes truth to the function. How I wish the scourge of cancer were defeated, though, as with the possum, I wonder if the question of charity is the issue, or rather misuse of funds by thousands of overcharging cancer research centers, don’t know, but charity- must have charity. For me, it would be grant me charitable cures, or, insured heal thyself, or something like that. I am surprised that the answer, at least metaphorically, for Krebs or anyone else was “clear”, for charity or not. This I can say, without lending myself to “charity”, this is a fine work. Continue on with the series. If none other, I find the piece both endearing and thought provoking. Enjoy your day.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-01-09 05:50:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Please James bring them on.........hopefully this series will be found in book form for all the world to see as well.......nothing to offer as you have once again created and shared what comes from your heart and your pen and it is the best........Looking forward to more, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2007-01-08 20:05:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I like the delivery of this poem and the childlike wisdom within it. You say you will post more of these. I think it a good idea James. This is strong and straight like a child..no fuss no muss, just straight and simple phrasing and truths..
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-01-06 11:28:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, Please tell me you are making a collection of these jewels and that you will be offering them in publication. I know this isn't much by way of a crit but I adore these, this is out of the box and delves into a realm we should all look more into. I can find NO fault with this or the others connected to this, I just sit in awe of imaginative well penned works that definitely need to be preserved. Thank you for your offerings, they are appreciated and enjoyed. Lora
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