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This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-01-08 10:10:08 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Grandness

Like some with the net, I surf movie channels, movie scripts can be so tiresome, redundant, PC plugged, dumbed-down juvenile. Then there's this dashing figure, wrought from war, a hero with hand-in-hand and briefcase. Humbly coming to a man making excuses for, "not being over there." He wants to buy back a woman he's sold for 100 (pounds sterling.) Every cent he has, slight appreciation, 37,400 (pounds sterling.) "I hope you don't terribly mind", he informs her. "Did that leave us with any money?" without hesitation. "Not a cent." without concern. She is into his arms like blown newspaper to a bench in a storm. One penny more and it would have not been so grand.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Sharon J Eisenmann On Date: 2007-01-26 11:06:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi James, There is a kind of 'black and white movie'charm in this, if you know what I mean. Totally love the phrase, "She is into his arms like blown newspaper to a bench in a storm." What a grand simile that is! The end, well, I find it charming as well. Thanks for making me laugh and the little pick-me-up. This time of year can be soooo depressing. Sharon

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-01-11 09:56:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, Simply delightful, so honest and forthcoming. How often are outlooks pivoted on the smallest of incidents, the blow of the wind and the color can completely change. This goes so far beyond the first read, the initial impression, where do we place our values, what sacrifices are we willing to make-- for we all know everything requires a sacrifice, but just what are we willing to do for what we want or need to make right. I think it is fair to say that at this point I have become one of your fans, I really like the clarity and candor you put forth and especially the way you present it. Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-01-10 10:45:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Wow, James, This is packed with such stark truths. Poignant, and honest, this write stabs at the very heart and psyche of the reader. Love the beginning lines...seems so much of whats offered on TV or movies these days is both trivial, and boring. Insults to our intelligence. I adore the powerful ending, though! So very well said...."like blown newspaper to a bench in a storm..." Brilliant! Thanks so much for sharing. Goes on my list, to be sure. Warmest regards, Mary

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-01-10 10:42:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi JCH....I have read this poem several times and believe you are speaking of the worn out and tiresome plots in some movies and the things we see on t.v. The dashing hero feels he has to make an excuse for his briefcase when he thinks he should be sporting medals or at the very least some symbol of war. I do wonder why he sold this woman and what compels him to buy her back with his very last cent. The woman who realizes he spent all his money to win her back is emboldened to give him his money's worth. However, if he had one cent left she would have not felt the urge to reward him. This is a peek into human nature which you have done very well. I like the phrase..."dumbed-down juvenile"...very original. Your last line is "grand" and pulls the enire poem together. Again, your written words are innovative and evocative....well done. Your friend....mt

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-01-10 00:19:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James, Again I'm unsure of what this means...... What I get from it through my lenses is of the thought.....Why/how would he sell a person? [movie plots] And she certainly appreciated in value. And I would be upset is someone 'sold' me! I wouldn't fly into his arms. And for he was lacking enough money it wouldn't end so well! If he was wrought from war why is he a hero? Just trying to get your idea. Sorry I've failed you again. Were you meaning down [right] juvenile? I find less and less movies I care to watch, I personally like ones that make my heart fill full. Ones I come away with a new perspective. always my best to you, Dellena

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