This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-03-26 23:23:25 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Present Plan

Another test in the span of the  Plan, For  My Life Etc., etc.,  How the dark devilish world spins out of reach Trumpet and taps defile open ears waiting for victory Just too bad for you my dear, woman up and don’t shed a tear It has been written, it’s in stone, and you can’t bruise from pain Emotional, to the bone As if all and all hasn’t been enough Or not enough of  Absent love, or the door to walk through to feel at home To bang the drum, be humble and alone It’s another test in the span of the Plan For  Your  Life Etc., etc.

Copyright © March 2007 DeniMari Z.

Additional Notes:
Sorry for being so depressing, I lost my job today.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-04-05 13:50:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
I have come to understand that planning is not always a good thing for we are just taking a journey through life poet and this journey has many roads. Some good, some not so good but in reality we always seem to grow by our choices. Now this loss of job might be very depressing but just think of the new adventures waiting for you. Looking forward to the poem that shouts you have a new job.......good luck in your journey. God Bless, Claire


This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-04-02 17:06:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I'm sorry, my dear. Your poem captures exceedingly well the period between being hit and resolving the blow. Structuring the line/word as you have taken to do has a point and you make it well. In fact yours is a poem that shows the compensations mind goes through on the way home from defeats in life. And as well as that can be done without self-pity. It is almost a template for how to do it. Now let me think about his, "you can't bruise from pain". Never saw it put that way, are you sure...seems like you should...no, you're right (he said, feeling like a big baby.) Damn good line. "or the door to walk through to feel at home", excellent. Screws up my voting list though. Gotta get you in there. Good hunting for a new job. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-04-01 15:39:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94118
Hi Deni....I am so sorry you lost your job....that is so devastating. I won't even say things could be worse as you have had a hard and painful year and right now you didn't need the loss of job and income to push you down even farther. You did a very healthy thing by writing about this new event in your life. You expressed your feelings quite well but I am sure you probably had a few discouraging words you could have written but decided not to! I don't know what type of work you do but from what I know of you I believe you are strong and nothing can keep you down for long. I am sure you will move past this quickly and perhaps a new job is just what you need. My best to you and I will keep you in my prayers. Blessings....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2007-03-29 10:07:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
DeniMari, good to unload the downside of life through your poetry. Losing a job has always been a traumatic time, but in reality a time to perhaps revamp the direction of ones future. "another test in the span of the Plan" says it all. A testing ground for the spirit perhaps. Well, having lost many jobs both thru my own fault and to expansions, retooling, reductions, cut backs, restructurings, etc, etc, etc., I can comiserate with your feelings, but know that all things happen for a reason, and good things happen eventually. A friend always tells me about the future. Her take on it is that if we could see everything to come today, a dull parade of boring tomorrows would surely follow. Good luck with the balance of the "test." Best wishes, thanks for the post, and Peace to you. Paul
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-03-27 21:56:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DeniMari, And you may this to be a turning point in your life also. It is interesting how the 'plan' works. I know of a religion that in the other world after reincarnation, you choose the life you wish to live. As if it were a play and you pick the character to do. Then you merely act your part thinking that by your free choice you are where your at. Henceforth......the only real choice is how you react. Positively, miserably, or whatever. we choose the path to learn the most1 it is an interesting concept.... Think of being your own boss possabily? Hope things get smashingly better. Good job of expression. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-03-27 14:21:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DeniMarie, Wow, I can truly empathize with you. Often we get tired of hearing "suck it up" or "your strong, you can handle it", sometimes we just need to sit down and cry. Your write is so "spot on" with so many these days, well stated and I applaud you for your open candor. Prayers are coming your way, he will always be there for you even when you don't ask. God bless, Lora
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