This Poem was Submitted By: Paul R Lindenmeyer On Date: 2007-04-22 19:31:55 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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While Taking Notes......

Pens, scribes, notebooks and professors,   seekers, students and seers,       comingled, pursuing reality's ends. Equasions applied, solutions solidified,   while logic and creativity     are pursued with fierce determinations. Truths are questioned, dissected,    and finally deemed unable to       answer the age old dilemas... Who are we?   Why are we here?     Where are we going? 33 receive the answers,   before the lecture ends,     or the final bell tolls....                

Copyright © April 2007 Paul R Lindenmeyer


This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-05-05 21:47:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.64286
Wondering how many were in the class since only thirty three got the answer before the professor finished.......well, you came prepared though and I think you may have found the answer in the end as well. Interesting read; allows one to use their own imagination and images that you have created with the flare of your pen. Who are we? Why are we here? Where are we going? No matter what we are taught by others I do believe we have to make that choice for ourselves and hope that the road we have choosen is the right path for us; as the years change and grow one into another so do the choices and yet when the end does come we just go back to where we came from. You see we were once angels in God's Heavenly Garden and we shall return there some day..........been there, done that and that is where we are going if the path we choose was a good one. Okay I am rambling but I can honestly say this makes one think of birth, death and what lies in between..............been kissed by the breath of God as I laid dying and I might add there is no fear in dying..........it is the closing of one door and the opening of another. Good luck in the contest, God Bless, Claire


This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-04-29 12:45:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
First, Equations instead of "Equasions" and dilemmas instead of "dilemmas". Small points, to be sure...when the poem reserves a rare excellence. The title, "While Taking Notes....." is an interesting and impressive choice. One full of meaning, both astute to what so many of the shooter's victims had been doing at the time of the carnage and relevant to what we all subscribe in the face of realizing such a thing possible. Asking, "Who are we?/Why are we here?/Where are we going?"...yes, such a time is when we do most. The supreme irony of, while, "pursuing reality's ends" and pondering such equations and questions, we might end up ourselves in the most intense of all... what price life? When the question CAN conjecture, "before the lecture ends,/ or the final bell tolls...." Indeed. One hell of an ending for poem that goes vastly beyond condolence. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-04-23 17:17:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
Hi Paul....it is so nice to read one of your poems and I'm glad you chose to post it here! At first read I thought this poem is just what it says...a day in the life of a student or someone who has gone back to school. But then in my funny brain I began to wonder if it is a metaphor for the way we live our lives. The questions you pose do seem unanswerable and they most likely are. But we all ask them anyway. Do you remember Arnie Watchman? He passed away a few months ago but he was always asking these questions...now I think he wanted to know if death was final or if it is just another journey to get where we are going. I must ponder this piece and the questions! Well done. Cheers....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-04-22 20:47:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Paul, Interesting, Sounds like a Psychology class I took. After all is said and done everything depends......on everything else. Nobody knows who, what, or why! This is very contemplative. Beats me how 33 get the answers that nobody knows! Neat thoughts to ponder and I'm pondering.... Dellena ,
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