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Prairie Winds

Down the valley over the plains   the aspen and sage grows. Vapid green, shaded golden stain   austere beauty flows. Night stars consume a peaked sky,   lusty land waits the day. Geese in a V are flying by   thrusting cloud wisps away. Prairie winds pushing tumbleweeds   twists and birls around me. Wind flowers born of carefree seeds   alive in pageantry. I walk with bare and hushed feet   silent sorrows vanish. The convex gleams of light replete,   refresh and astonish.

Copyright © May 2007 marilyn terwilleger

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-06-04 01:06:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Yes, nature can be very healing. And one feels closer to God and everything. In a pool of belonging in the universe. Love is within the all. And you showed this above. I like this! Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-05-31 16:02:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, I am not sure what I expected when reading this piece. There was a bit of celebration, admiration- the melding of soul and beauty- to culminate in astonishment. I would like to see that valley, where aspen and sage grow together. It must be a remarkable sight, as you say the “vapid green, shaded golden stain” Standing back it is obvious the “austere” crown is yielded by the watcher, or maybe not. I enjoyed the word “birl”. I have never known it before and wondered if you knew it or discovered it. I love the discovery of a new gem. It is now in my repertoire. Thank you. I think “bare feet” is a metaphor for “bared soul” and leads into the moment when “silent sorrows vanish”. What a moment. I feel though that, by context; like me- there is a bit of sweetness that leaves when the sorrow wanes. Friends are friends forever. Refreshing piece, well worth the journey.
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-05-17 12:02:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
The poem is quite good, Marilyn. I've watched as you've developed more and more your own interesting way with image-making. "Night stars consume a peaked sky," is by far your best here, but "convex gleams of light" is equally interesting. With this ability evident, "Geese in a V" is a little bit of a let-down". You might breathe a little more color into it. "Replete" dangles, causing the reader to ask, with what? All minor suggestions, but addressed they might improve the poem's read. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-05-13 08:58:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Love the title Prairie Winds and all that follow. Interesting to be able to see places I have never been through the eyes of someone first hand.............images just flow with this one; Prairie winds pushing tumbleweeds twists and birls around me. Wind flowers born of carefree seeds alive in pageantry. The Lord's beauty in motion for certain. Well done as always; thanks for posting, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-05-12 11:43:03
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Such an easy flowing write, colorful images dance in the mind and just as your closing line you have replenished the spirit with this poem. Isn't it such a blessing what nature undisturbed can give to us, to replenish us, nurture us, soothe us. Thank you so much for this "convex gleam of light". Best, Lora
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