This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2007-05-23 08:19:28 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Truest Fan You've been the truest fan
The Red Sox ever had
When they won the World Series
it was for you that I was glad
You’ve cared for people all your life
mother, father and child
I know that we're all sorry
for the times we drove you wild
But in truth we always listened
though we wouldn't let it show
you planted seeds of wisdom
that took some time to grow
Just think of all the people
we pass your insight to
I wonder if you really know
but then again I’m sure you do
The ripple of your life
has spread around the earth
as you traveled seeing children
and as they in turn gave birth
Another generation
is forging their own way
Thanks to you they have the strength
to joyfully seize their day
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Copyright © May 2007 Kenneth R. Patton
Additional Notes:
I had the good fortune to be able to read this to my Mom before she passed. Like many of her generation she thought "real" poems should rhyme. She often said, "The only ones you can remember are the ones that rhyme."
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-05-30 05:53:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.73333
Ken , I am so deeply sorry to learn of your mom's passing and I hope and pray you know she is in a wonderful place with those she loved in life that have gone on before her. What a wonderful tribute to her in life that you have presented and being able to read it to her while she was still with you must bring some peace to your own aching heart.........now your own journey continues and your mother's wisdom will remain within your heart forever. Take good care , God Bless, well done my friend, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-05-27 22:08:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ken,
A nice poem of tribute for your mom. She sounds like a neat lady.
Righteous, honorable, and no nonsense kinda gal.
I feel your love and respect in your words. I'm sure she was pleased.
You must miss her terribly.
Good rhyme, good flow and meter.
The title I interpet as you being one of her truest fans also...
Nice job,
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-05-26 11:38:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Ken,
I'm glad you posted this here. I had read it in the forum, and was quite taken by it. I like the straight forwardness of the style - there's nothing to sift through to find the true meaning of the poem.
The emphasis on family - the core of this piece is honorable - due to the fact there are so many
broken and extended families nowadays. It's a treat to read something as solid as this.
Once again, my heartfelt sincere sympathy to you, on the loss of your mother. I can relate, just loosing my own mother recently - so I'm aware of the dreadful emotions that come with the loss.
My best, May God comfort you & yours,
sincerely,
Denimari
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-05-25 22:01:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.92857
Ken,
This is such a wonderful tribute to your mother, I'm quite sure she would be very pleased with your writing here though it might have brought her to blush being an unpresumtion type person of great humility. Again, I would not change a thing nor suggest any chances as this is to close to your heart and should not be tampered with. God Bless.
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-05-23 14:53:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
Hi Ken....I am happy to see you posted this poem here. If you have been to the forum you know I encouraged you to do so. It is a lovely tribute to your mom who must have been a fine lady. How wonderful that her family was beside her when the Lord called her home. I am so glad you were able to read this poem to her and the rhyming is well done so I know she was pleased. Your line..."The ripple of your life has spread around the earth"...is my favorite and I hope she got to see all her grandchildren. She had a full life and raising 10 children must have been her greatest joy. I know her spirit will live inside your heart forever.
Blessings....Marilyn
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