This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2007-06-08 13:25:32 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Hey Gramma!

Did you hear about Katie? She's really doing great My lettuce is growing Tomatoes and peppers too, Kim and I can’t wait The Red Sox are slumping the fair-weather fans are worried and already jumping ship Nothing new there I guess We real fans are used to it I wrote a new poem today I hope you like it I’m sober seven years and it’s all about the journey and how incredible it is Keri gave it to a friend of hers and she says it really hit home Perhaps he’ll start on his journey now there’s really no way to know   I guess that’s it from me for now anyway I best stop goofing off I’d like to say don’t worry I’m doing okay but right now I’m really not.

Copyright © June 2007 Kenneth R. Patton

Additional Notes:
Just some musings to my Mom.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-07-05 20:13:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.82353
Kenneth, This I feel is a comfort for you to talk to your mom. All the daily things seemingly trivial keep people grounded. So in that respect this poem does that. I'm not even family and I get the same comfort. Ending with missing 'her' is certainly understandable. I like your incredible journey/I applaud you! You know how to relate your emotions. I wished you'd title it to Mom instead of gramma. Dellena


This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-07-05 07:57:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
One of the best gifts a child, of any age, can present to their mom , you have presented within the lines of this one my friend..........just to be able to sit, talk, hold her hand, wipe her forehead, while she is here with us; knowing the love she gave her family is now being returned and oh so very well deserved; having shared your own fears and your conquests, knowing how proud she was and still is of you......life has many roads Ken, each one brings us all closer to that heavenly garden where your mom is now watching over you. Thanks for posting, this one is well presented, nice word flow, many images presented with the flare of your pen. Each day is a new beginning and you will do just fine. Happy to read your veggies are doing so well. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-07-02 22:02:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Dear Ken, It will help, to keep up at this, I've done the same thing since loosing my mom. I like the form of this piece, just a casual conversation, some of light, but some of it not. You have done a remarkable thing in keeping sober for so long and should be congratulated. If it was alcohol, then I can relate. I was married to an alcoholic for twelve years; but he was abusive so I had to get out of it. It's been a journey for him as well but after six years, he still relapses without me there to pick up the pieces. It's ok, not to feel right. The loss of a parent creates a huge void (my eyes are tearing.) May God bless you - Peace & prayers, Denimari
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-06-19 09:03:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ken, You show the surface of your feelings as you write a poem letter, yet the depth is also seen by the lack of showing the full picture and you indicate in the last stanza. It is here the cry for understanding is shown. Musings yes, but reality is what you make the reader think about. Thanks for sharing, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-06-08 18:29:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ken, This is so real, not dressing it up, so natural. I adore this type of write, it let's one become for just a moment a part of the writers life; you get the sense of resignation, a sigh between statements, one can even feel the writers vulnerbility. This is so easy to read and re-read, eloquent in it's simplicity; delicate in it's emotion. Very poignant, I find that I still write and talk to people who've passed decades before, there is a certain comfort in it. This is beautifully soft and again so natural, kudos. No nits from me. God Bless, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-06-08 16:20:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Ken....this is such a heart rendering poem. I have read it several times and I can easily feel the lonliness and pain in your words...I'm sure your mom does too. This piece does sound just like you are visiting with your mom so if you meant it that way you surely accomplished that. You said you have been sober for seven years....I didn't know that was a problem in your life but if so my hat if off to you! You may not think so, now, but you will begin to heal with each passing day. Writing poetry was such a catharsis for me when I lost my husband and I think you will find it to be for you...so keep writing. Well done.. Hugs...Marilyn
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