This Poem was Submitted By: Donna Carter Soles On Date: 2007-07-15 16:31:23 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Mask Why all the masquerade?
You have not revealed yourself
To the world of the eyes.
You can be so bloody cold,
And so misleadingly indifferent.
Why must one wear a mask?
It could just be a matter of
Conjecture of we do not want
To face...
Or that which we fathom to be?
I know you could come with
Unwanted results, but yet the
World seems to need you --
Just like an actor upon
Your stage.
Is there any way to appease you?
Is there a way to bring forth the
The nightmares you've so graciously
Hidden inside?
No...WE are the mask --
The Mask that has hidden the truth
From both of our eyes! |
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Copyright © July 2007 Donna Carter Soles
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-08-12 00:54:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Donna,
Sometimes one can't help but wear a mask. I wear mine often as to not be emotional vunerable to those in life. However, I write my insecurities quite often sharing only with my fellow poets. So, only those who read the words I write will ever know the real me. Others live on the other side of my mask. Excellent write!
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-08-07 16:36:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88235
Donna,
Sounds like a man? [typically]
I think we all hide/in fact how could we possibly show all of ourselves to
another even if we wished too?
But some have heavier mask than most. Some are secretive to excess.
I believe because they are protecting themselves.
The less one knows, the less weaponry to use against them.
The more one knows the more one can harm.
from my viewpoint!
I'm for hiding/my lifes an open book. ouch!
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-06 23:04:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84615
Donna,
Dark poetry at its best. Yes the question is asked but the mask is always present. What really hides behind the facade. Is it weakness that would be shown, is it a past, is it a want, so many questions yet the reality is there a mask to avoid being seen.
Well done, Thanks for sharing. Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie Spicer On Date: 2007-07-30 11:37:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Donna,
Gosh, it has been so long since I have been here. I never can pass up any of your poetry as I am not quite sure I catch each element, but I love the way you write. This poem is a story of someone, I believe, who does not want to show their “real†self. It could be speculation of what they do not want anyone to see or grasp. It sounds if they feel they will be rejected if they show their real self.
Yes, the unwanted results, which we all feel at times, are frightening. Yet others need you to see you as you are. I love the way you wrote “Just like an actor upon your stageâ€.
Can they be pacified? Is their a way to soothe the nightmares of past and go on? Possibly they feel if they keep all of this inside, they will be accepted much easier, but it has to be so difficult and painful to continue to do this. We all have masks, to agree, but to come out of these and see the reality of each other may shock others that they are accepted just as they are. The truth is the answer, unknown, but the truth.
You write so well. You’re poem flows and give the reader a newness and awareness of how we do hide from ourselves. Great job and miss you.
With love,
Debbie
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-07-17 17:09:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Donna,
A high thread of emotions feeds this poem, with resentment, anger, sarcasm and pointed comments to someone you cannot please. At best you have articulated the way you feel, in bold analogies, your reference point being what this person has made you feel inside of yourself. Why we choose to torment ourselves this way is beyond me. Some of these types of issues never resolve themselves - they just go on, and get bigger.
I enjoyed you poem. Venting is good - sounding feelings out on paper is very healthy. I wish you resolve in your situation.
sincerely,
Denimari
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-07-17 02:36:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deep poem Donna.....one with many avenues a reader might wonder down. Indeed, some kind of battle of sorts appears to be going on within the lines; perhaps a struggle with one self and what one might have been. Interesting, well presented, images continue to flow. Thanks for posting, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2007-07-16 22:32:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I like the way you turn this around at the end and gave it the ending that you did. fessing up to the "we" in the "masquerade" an enlightment or realization but no resolve. It is so hard to trust enough to go bare faced isn't it. They say that is what real love involves and so so many of us seek that, but not the courage for with it comes the fear of being hurt and all the pain..so we hide behind so many many masks..which in the long of it , a prison make for our souls. You have ended this answering the opening line question..excellent!
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-07-16 17:26:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Donna....this piece is so profound that I have read it several times trying to dig in between the lines to find what is not written. The mask could be a metaphor but the emotion is so raw that I tend to think it is just what it says. A conversation with oneself or someone very close to you. Now that I think of it the mask could be the poet's dreams or a lover who refuses to let the poet see who he truly is. Oh dear, I have completely fractured the meaning of this poem in my feeble attempt to understand where it is coming from. Not only is it deep and intriguing but it is written with a great deal of passion and emotion. Very well done.
Blessings....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2007-07-15 19:06:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Donna,
This was a deep write and one that can be interpreted on various levels - depending primarily on the reader's line of thought. I would like to see this as a 'dual personality' theme, one of conflicts between a divided inner self.....yes, it could also have to do with an estranged lover and the like but that would seem a little to obvious and a lot less contemplative.
In keeping with my interpretation of the theme - "No...WE are the mask --"....i find the depth intriguing...a split personality - one that feels it needs t eb itself and the other that wishes to appease the world performance after performance ("Just like an actor upon/ Your stage").
Nice raw thought behind this emotionally charged poem.
Duane.
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