This Poem was Submitted By: Nancy Ann Hemsworth On Date: 2007-08-08 19:55:47 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Living In The Questions
Align you heart to the beat of the Earth
Slow your body down and merge
Allow your breath to lift with the breeze
Let it rise to touch the tops of the trees
Soar high as never before
Go live your life in the questions
Don't try to solve all the mysteries
Or miss life, obsessed in the truth
The magic lies on the road you choose
And the joys of the natural Earth
Go live your life in the questions
Breathe with the Earth, let your essence flow
Let your dreams take you, wherever they go
Live every day, in your own special way
Be true to yourself at the end of the day
Go live your life in the questions
More joy will come, in the one by one
With one step after the other
For no one knows where your road will bend
Or what's there waiting for you my friend
Where the one life starts and the other ends
Go live your life in the questions
*chorus*
Dance along, dance along, to your heartbeats song
Cause the Beat will be right and the rhythm strong
For the truth is different for everyone
Go live your life in the questions
Go live your life in the questions |
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Copyright © August 2007 Nancy Ann Hemsworth
Additional Notes:
I belong to the Unitarian Universalist Church and was approached to write a song lyric suitable for your songbook..here is the result. First try and writing lyrics..this also could stand as a poem just using the "chorus" as the last and finishing verse.
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-09-04 15:58:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88235
Hi Nancy....yes this song could easily stand alone as a poem....and does. It is very well written with a lovely message and I would love to hear it sung. You have good word choices and I will not attempt to pick a favorite line or phrase lest I do an injustice to the rest. Well done and I hope to read more from your pen soon.
Blessings, Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-08-24 09:36:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nancy,
I like how you state how we are part of the Earth and we should cherish it by joining in the environment. I assume that the chorus is after each stanza and it fits well for it is different for each and everyone one of us. This is a well defined lyrical piece and like you said it can stand also as a poetic piece for you give us thoughts to ponder on. First try and very well done. I also noticed how you have a rhyming technic in the first and third stanza and a different structure in the second and fourth. Was this intentional? (Earth, merge) (breeze trees), (flow, go) (way,day) then in the second no rhyme and in the fourth the last three lines rhyme.
Thanks for sharing, Thomas
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-08-12 00:16:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
You are so right, everyone lives life in the question. You never know what path life will lead you nor do you ever know what to expect in time, therefore yes, I agree, live life in the question.
I love you imagery and my FAVORITE stanza is...Breathe with the Earth, let your essence flow
Let your dreams take you, wherever they go
Live every day, in your own special way
Be true to yourself at the end of the day
Go live your life in the questions.....
Couldn't be more breathtaking!! I absolutly love your words here!
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-08-10 10:39:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nancy,
What a spirit filled write, how wonderful to be able to do this for your church; I'm sure they will all like it very much and appreciate your talent. In your first line I believe you have a typo, "Align you heart" is that suppose to be "your" instead of "you"? Thanks for shareing this with us.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-08-08 22:48:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
This is beautiful Nancy and for your first attempt I do believe you have it .......right from the start your words just flowed; the feelings attached to the images presented from the flare of your pen and the feelings within your own heart came forth..........a beautiful combination of life, of spiritual oneness with the world we live in; the opening stanza makes me want to just reach out and take His hand and walk with Him forever. Great job, thanks for posting and sharing and I so would love to hear the final results of this being placed to music and sung for the world to hear........God Bless, Claire
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