This Poem was Submitted By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-10-20 15:02:57 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Enchanted Morn

The crisp pirouette of unfastened leaves lends glories to the shivering trees when shorn and falling rain sews fringe upon the eaves, while heather gathers rime enchanting the morn. 

Copyright © October 2007 marilyn terwilleger

Additional Notes:
Quatrain poem. Four lines with a designated rhyme scheme


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2007-11-06 21:09:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
You make us watch a waltz, and be glad for it. The dancing leaves, the shivering trees, and falling rain. We easily sit and hear that symphony. “Enchanting the morn”- there is your gaze- sweet as the sight and sounds. The rain (a white noise of sort) being the fringe- a nice visual for the vision. Very nice piece, well written and alive with the moment.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-11-06 01:14:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.70000
Marilyn, Nice. I like the internal rhyme. leaves/trees/.eaves/[even sews picks up he s's] What can't you do? Wow, I'm impressed. I learned that rime is icy coating....Now if I could just remember it! Yo, Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2007-11-04 15:40:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
glory? (pirouette - glory... ettes - glories?) I would stop at line 3 with a period "...eaves." Then start the last line with "Heather..." It gets a little run-onny without a break. Hope you're well. Tom
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-10-29 01:23:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.62500
Marilyn. you write with such finesse. I only wish I had the vocabularly you have. You have never writen anything that didn't hold the attention of the reader. Keep writing my friend, you are wonderful. Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-10-20 20:28:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Marilyn, Quatrain poem it is and a fine one at that. Very enjoyable and super discritive. I really enjoyed this concise brief poem, it is one that begs to be read and re-read. Best, Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-10-20 20:06:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88235
I love the sound of this, the images that you created with the flare of your pen and the change in season.... Well done Quatrain poem and rhyme scheme....Thanks for posting, God Bless, Claire
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