This Poem was Submitted By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2007-11-16 15:36:50 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Quest
Her native American smile enticing
her movement an art form
rendering me helpless
This spirit reaches to hold solid ground
yet her soul demands fulfillment
grasping, all I reach is air
I retreat slipping back into her domain
this spirit engulfed
Conquered
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Copyright © November 2007 Thomas H. Smihula
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-12-06 19:40:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Thomas,
Another beautiful write. I enjoyed reading this. Short and effective.
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2007-11-18 20:47:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93750
Interesting read Tom, interesting path your world has taken us. Her native American smile reminds me of my ste daughter who has deep roots within her soul........her high cheek bones, long black hair and beauty of inner peace always stand out........I sense you have found such a beauty and your two souls may have touched in this lifetime thus the images created within. Thanks again for posting, be safe, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-11-18 17:10:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.83333
Hi tom...I can't help but wonder who this native American lady is. I wonder if she is a part of your life or perhaps a beautiul dream..no matter the poem is lovely. The title and the ending tells me you have longed for her but in the end you conquered her. Hummm a mystery that will keep me trying to figure it out!
Welldone...
Marilyn
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