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This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-12-02 14:39:53 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Whispers of Truth

The cottonwood, its leaves still blown, warm winds nestling linger Tied not to any schedules known and content to stay unto December. The cold will come we know to drape the ground, the roofs and limbs With puffs and fluffs of tender snow sometime to turn bright white to dim. This room untouched I thought no season turn nor glimpse of chill until The cobwebs where I often sat appeared to much the nebula Some distant galaxy might will.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-12-20 00:58:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James, I feel a bit of melancholy from this piece. The words are good and so nicely descriptive. You must have memories of other holidays that weigh upon you from the changes. People enter and leave with our regrets. If we could pick a time to live again..........in our mind we have them all. I pray your xmas season is pleasing for you. I'm a bit of a hum bugger lately. I'm so upset over our sick world....... Blessings to you, Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mary J Coffman On Date: 2007-12-09 18:13:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James, The visuals in this are abundant and vivid. From the cottonwoods in stanza one, the "puffs and fluffs" (nice assonance here)of snow, to the long-empty room. Love the "nebula" metaphor used to depict the cobwebs...wonderful imagery.Your language, as is usual for you, is stellar. This poem seems to sing of contemplation to me....deep thought and reminiscing. The last line sums it so nicely, saying that it must have been some time ago since you have frequented that room. Even though short, there are so many layers here...so much woven into these lines. I love when a poem evokes deep thought. You have not disappointed this reader. Thanks for sharing, James. I so enjoy your work, and have missed reading it. Best Always, Mary

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2007-12-07 00:17:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James, This is great! Your first 2 stanzas put me exactly where I am, in winterland. Brrr. My puppy is about 5 months old and I seem to have to take him outside quite often (him being so small) and everytime I go outside, I see and feel your poem here. Especially as I stated, the 1st 2 stanzas. Seriously, as I read this, I felt myself standing outside in the cold again..lol Always, Rene'

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2007-12-04 15:39:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
JCH, This is a bit of a departure for you, I think. A movement to a lyricism that is different for you. An interesting sign of growth and development. And the lyricism here is very fine, too. I think it is only a matter of time and some additional growth and you will be at the point which this type of lyricism becomes second nature to you, and I look forward to what is to come from you. I think the "to" of the last stanza should be "too." Or do you mean, appeared to "many"? Or does my "many" include non-human intellectual beings? In which case one might use the more impersonal "much" when speaking about other species and life forms than a number of such among one's own species (the "many"). Anyway, the last stanza is redolent with inspiration. It's nice when one becomes a vehicle for such expression. Incredibly nice, And rare. MSS

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