This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2008-01-24 09:20:20 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Melancholy’s Finale The mysteries of the mind
are still unknown
In spite of all science
Sadness of the soul
is sometimes impervious
requiring a miracle rare
We are left to wonder
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Copyright © January 2008 Kenneth R. Patton
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-02-01 14:55:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Hi Ken....Don't know if I ever told you but I am a fan of the terse poem. I think it takes skill to say a lot with just a little and you have done that here. Some may not understand how our souls can be sad but I believe I do. It is a more profound sadness than that of the mind and it takes much effort to turn that sadness into a smile, no matter how hard we try. I think the loss of a loved one causes the soul to weep and you are right it requires a miracle to rescue us. Well written poem that makes on stop and think. Well done.
marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-01-30 21:33:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Kenneth,
I feel that this has to do with one departing this world and not knowing if they are all right.
It is difficult to be at peace and move on assurrd they are ok.
So we wonder, pray, and tryto carry on after they are gone.
Only knowing that we miss them, we love them and that will never ever die.
I know no more to say to help you.
Blessings,
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie Spicer On Date: 2008-01-28 08:25:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Dear Ken,
A beautifully written piece and one that touched me. It seems not matter about the “length†of a poem, but it’s amazing ability as how it makes the reader see the depth of what it says. I certainly do understand there is so much we don’t know about the mind, as it seems to be the core part of the body (other than the heart), which remains such a mystery to us all. I certainly know of the mystery’s of the mind for so much waits to be discovered and most likely we will never find all. Mental Health, for us all, remains such a mystery. Yes, neurotransmitters have been found, studied, and yet look at all the millions of cases of the unknown there are. Why do we feel elated some days and so depressed the next? For that matter, it can occur within a very short time!
The words you write have so much depth and such astounding questions we yet ask even in this days of wonders in medicine. I would like to know so much more but I doubt if all will ever be found.
Thank you for such a wonderful take on the questions still out there. You have great insight! Sure miss you!
Debbie
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-01-26 15:06:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.70000
Certainly hit home with this one Ken......been in tears most of the day with the sadness of my soul
knowing I am in need of a miracle of some sort.......enjoyed the thoughts presented and the knowledge left to find.......stay warm good job.....God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Terry A On Date: 2008-01-24 23:02:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
Hi Ken,
This poem is delightful and so deceptively simple. Finale, the movement that leads to the body of the poem, which defines melancholy as being sad thoughtfulness. You use capital letters to delicately emphasize the change in thought, and the lack of punctuation in this poem, establishes a very contemplative pace, as though mirroring thoughts as they go through the mind. When thinking we do not punctuate (as though written on paper) our thoughts, rather space exists between them.)
Now, in six short lines you bring up the most significant of subjects, 'mysteries of the mind', 'sadness of the soul' and "a miracle rare'. 'Science' and the other word in the poem most related to science, 'impervious' - impermeable, watertight; which swings back on the 'are still unknown'. As though science is not able to explain the mind or the soul or as yet hasn't, or so is 'wondered'.
Every line in this poem enhances the other lines and it is effective because the reader is drawn into the contemplation, by thinking of these subjects too.
Few words to raise questions of the highest calibre. The reader is 'left to wonder' too. That is what this poem achieves, it opens the doors to these thoughts.
'Requiring a miracle rare' is exquisite. As though the soul might touch upon the unexplained grace that miracles are, in receiving what is most needed.
Terry
p.s. Ken:
No writer's block there! Glad to read the Muse is visiting you again!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-01-24 12:19:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
Ken,
What a great pondering, and such good mind food. No nits with this succinct well penned poem, enjoyable, easy to read and most welcomed this AM.
Best
Lora
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