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This Poem was Submitted By: Claudia F. Sepe On Date: 2008-02-15 21:33:26 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Law Office

If you get yourself in a law office Have you wonder why you are in it? If you see other in the office Have you wonder what problems they have? What they are doing in a law office? Do they have the same problems as you do? Sometime I wonderâ€¦ Is it easy for them to go through what you are going through? Do they have the money to pay the attorney? Are they selling what they have? We all have problems, some more than others But there are just some of us whose is willing to fight Fight for their rights Fight for what they believe in Fight to have their voice heard Even if it is to sell everything they have But is it worth it? Loose everything you have to be heard? Is it worth it to fight for your rights, believes or for your life? YES, it is worth it. If we donâ€™t fight for what we believe in If we donâ€™t fight for our rights and our lives, who will? We have to start change the world beginning changing our own.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2008-02-19 15:17:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Claudia, Well, I feel somewhat uplifted as to my vocation after reading this. For all its faults, the American legal system is one of the United States's great treasures. Those instances where a client comes along with your passion, and the cause is one in which the lawyer has the same passion - those are the cases that keep us lawyers young and alive. Of course, they can't all be like that - the practice would fold and the lawyer would be broke, financially and mentally. Having said that, your feelings and thoughts don't have any greater value when presented as verse than they would have in another form. If this were a poem, that wouldn't be the case. Ergo . . . If you don't know that, you should. If you know that and want to write poems, I hope you rewrite this and give it another crack; I'll give this another review. If you know that but don't care . . . you're wasting my time. MSS

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-02-19 11:34:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Claudia.....indeed.....a trip to the lawyer's office is an experience one will always remember.....the cost of which does at times use up all of one's resources and then some. I worked for a lawyer for fifteen years and at times found it hard to believe the amount of money spent by the client......and then the times the retainer was paid and never totally used or returned.....sad if you ask me.....I am not sure about the word believes being right but perhaps beliefs might be better placed.....in the ending line perhaps if you add the word (to change the world beginning with changing our own)...just a thought.....If you see others in the office (thus adding an 's' to other); But there are just some of us whose (who) is willing to fight Much food for thought within your lines poet and I know it is not easy to sit across from the attorney and talk about your situations whatever they may be......a nervous situation for everyone.....thanks for posting, look forward to more of your work, God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-02-17 00:22:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Claudia, Your message is true, if we can't change our world, how can the outer world get better either! It starts with ourselves, yes.' And you are absolutely right, it's worth it! Hats off to you! Beliefs instead of believes...... We have to start [to] change the world beginning changing our own. Good points, Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-02-16 17:46:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello Claudia, I'd love to give you a review however what you have presented here does not fall into the poetry catagory and falls under a "rant", getting something off your chest. If you offer this to us in poetry form I will be happy to review it for you. Best, Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-02-16 17:45:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Claudia.....This write is not a poem it is more just getting something off your chest, which is fine. However, if you would wirte it in poem form I would be glad to do a critique. Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2008-02-15 21:39:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Claudia...WOW, I take it you have been to an attornys office lately. I try to stay away from those places if at all possible though I too have been sitting in that chair wondering a time or two. Hope all is well. Rene

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