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The Dragon Inside The day crept into being as a scavenger seeking to eat the dead Watchful, hungry, in wait for the moment to masticate Taking, as time takes the hours away, gone, lost into ever Servant to the body, savior of mind, forgiven then forgotten To the front, onto the top, over board to duality of spirit Innocent, raw, naively blessed unto the holiness of self Unknowing unchallenged, loser of the battle raging for eternity Blood bathing, ripped heart, spineless forfeiture of the soul. Stars and galaxy’s shinning above me, and nobody loves me Useless to matter, zero to wonder, and triple minus to know Cause it will gain you everything and nothing just as equally It all doesn’t mean anything, they're just thoughts from whiles ago. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2008-03-07 05:35:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76923
Dellena,
You took me through several emotions in this piece. The 1st stanza was most mild, kind of sad...the 2nd stanza, you pick your mood up and actually seems like anger flew from your pen and the 3rd stanza, I liked best of all....It doesn't really mean anything (lol) they are thoughts from awhile ago..(perfect)
Always,
Rene'