This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2008-02-28 11:39:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Assume Love If we assume Love
The errant thought
The thought-less comment
Appear in their true light
If we assume Love
We needn’t be burdened
by what if
or slippery slopes
or writing on the wall
If we do assume Love
We begin in kindness
and travel enveloped
An era shared
Greater than the sum of two
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Copyright © February 2008 Kenneth R. Patton
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-03-07 22:52:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76471
Ah Ken,
Sounds like your getting a little zen on us...wonderful flow and enjoyed the thought process on this, the rational...good to see you. Your writing is very sage.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2008-03-03 23:19:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Just a perfect poem, really. Very hard for me to critique anything here. The subject is presented also maybe more poignant for me because I am dealing with learning to love someone in a long-distance relationship, and all the fears of this person who I am involved with.
Sorry it's not a 'real' critique, but more commentary.
Thanks,
Regis
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-03-03 19:37:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.64706
Assume Love is an eye catching title for this very nice read. Like the way you started each stanza with
If we do assume Love.......love can and does conquer all.......and I like the era shared greater than the sum of two.........good job......thanks for posting, hope all is well with you and yours, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2008-03-02 03:46:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ken,
If poems were to be judged strictly on content, I'd rank this pretty high. And there are some nice touches, such as the rhyme in "errant" and "comment."
But we have that elusive thing, the intangible, which can try, with varying measures of success, to define. The definition not ready to hand, I can only tell you that I do not find that "intangible" in this poem.
Though I do appreciate the content and some of the nice executions in expression you made.
My best to you,
Mark
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