This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2008-03-30 11:26:58 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Heart Passage Heart Passage
Wells of tears fill 'round my eye
A natural urge as I ache to cry
Yet dimly between heart and mind
Stoic emotions are all I find
No comfort brought in this release
My burdens leave me far from peace
Constriction bears down on me
throat feels tight, I cannot see
Lost in denying you are going to die
Dear mother please help me figure out why
Tell me how to hold your hand
God help me now to understand
When you leave this common earth
I'll fly angels out to search
And if they spy you anywhere
I�ll ask they keep you in there care
Until the light shines down for me
To follow you into eternity |
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Copyright © March 2008 DeniMari Z.
Additional Notes:
Repost - in honor of my mother who passed away 1/24/07. Also need to get rid of my credits.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-04-06 18:37:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.18182
DeniMari,
Very nice.
Shows your heartfelt love.
A good repost.
I lke your rhyme.
I like angels keeping her in there care.
Take care of yourself.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-04-02 19:53:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deni,
This was a fine read the first time you posted and is just as fine and heart wretching now..I also am trying to unload some of my credits...but I did so enjoy the read, the rhyme the cadance of your write.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-04-01 08:44:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.92857
DeniMari this is so beautiful and so filled with all of your inner emotions. I agree, tears do not always bring the release we need when our heart breaks or we do not understand what happened and why. Of course there are only two things in life we do know about birth and death.........I am certain your mom is with you every day as is mine; she shines in the night sky like a becon of light for you to find safety from your storms in, her love is everlasting as is the love of God........Your mother must be honored by this read for it is one worthy of the contest and framing as well. Thank you and God Bless, Claire
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