This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2008-04-02 09:06:34 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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You Wonder? (How could you?)

Why I prefer to sleep with you Instead of alone to laugh with you In place of silence to be alive with you Not merely breathing It’s easy, simple I’m in love, unmistakably, With You

Copyright © April 2008 Kenneth R. Patton


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-04-20 00:58:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Kenneth, It is wonderful to have someone to be with. It's wonderful to be in love. But it is also wonderful to be alone. And sometimes silence can be had wonderfully together [alive] as you say. You are much blessed to know this and to appreciate your gift. Dellena


This Poem was Critiqued By: Marcus J On Date: 2008-04-08 08:50:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.00000
It’s the soft L’s of this short piece that set the tone for this reader. The punctuation is at a minimum and works well. If I were to make one suggestion, it would be to shorten the title to simply “You Wonder.” It’s a bit wordy as is, and made me stumble somewhat between title and body. Your thoughts are penned poignantly, poet. I look forward to reading more of your work. Mark M
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-04-03 08:57:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Good morning Ken; love is in the air and it is so nice to read it from your pen......often we do wonder perhaps why some do what they do, remain with whom they are, make your life so much easier and enjoyeable.....love is the answer and you have stated it so nicely. Good for you and one for the list this month. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-04-02 14:45:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Ken, It is nice to see a poem from your pen. I really like this, simple, clean and to the point in a soft spoken way...an uncomplicated read, one that was easy to get the mind around without having to dig...such a nice breath of freshness. One small suggestion: drop "unmistakably" down one line, let it sit by it's self.. Best always, Lora
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