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Fairy Spring

The fairies beckon spring with soprano voice and fly aloft in silver streams of clouds, with golden hands they mold the sun with rays, and wake the breeze that sweeps the mist away. They coax the bulbs eternal oath of blooms to breathe before the evening amethyst. Through trees they flit and pirouette with glee and sprinkle magic dust with wings like fans. With quaint and quiet grace they promise blooms of resting flowers, chilled by winter’s pout. Their silver threads delight the rose and fern then weave the lilac tints that color spring. Withdrawn is ice that sealed the river’s flow, and captured waters kiss the fairy’s wand, while winter’s fingered grasp of stone relents. The spring remembers hands of fey and light, un-ruffles forest’s plume and spreads her gown of silk, that mends the winter’s worsted gray.

Copyright © June 2008 marilyn terwilleger

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-07-05 02:24:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Fairy enjoyable title that grabs one's attention and then delivers all that it promises. Your words bring to life fairies who in turn bring life back into the world. You can see them fly aloft in silver streams of clouds, with golden hands they mold the sun with rays, and wake the breeze that sweeps the mist away. How enchanting this is to me.........Spring is my most favorite time of the year for the world is awakening after its winter's nap and you have penned this so well. Your world flow and as they flow your images presented come to life before our eyes. Thank you again for sharing your God given talent with us. God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2008-06-08 17:35:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Like a metronome, the beat, just like I remembered your work from years past. Reading this poem, I am reminded of my hike yesterday and the butterflies flitting this way and that in the joy that is spring. I am reminded of how universal this feeling is for everyone and the energy is everywhere. One minor nit- They coax the bulbs eternal oath of blooms has a possessive voice, there for "bulb's eternal oath of blooms" would seem more appropriate here, but who is to say if you meant multiple bulbs or bulb's eternal oath. I guess it depends how you mean it. What I like to call a "full-color" poem! Beautiful. Thanks, Regis
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2008-06-04 12:07:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Lovely high-spirited poem, Marilyn, "The fairies beckon spring with soprano voice" (one beat too long on "sopranos I think) "with golden hands they mold the sun with rays, and wake the breeze that sweeps the mist away." (good images) ....Their silver threads delight the rose and fern then weave the lilac tints that color spring. (beautiful and melodic!) un-ruffles forest’s plume and spreads her gown of silk, that mends the winter’s worsted gray. {love that worsted image) Great homage to spring in this poem which mirrors psing in its bright word choices and sprighty rhythm. Good to see your work.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-06-03 20:14:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Marilyn, So nice to see a post from you. Your sonnet for spring is delightful. Sonnet count is right on the money, flows well from thought to thought throughout the poem. I especially like the delicate lacy words you've used to discribe spring and of course all being brought by natures faires makes this write completely charming to read. Thank you for this uplifting gift, it put a smile on my face and warmth in my heart. I shall send roses your way. Your mastery of poetic device and the sonnet is certainly something to applaud. TC Lora
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