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Elegy I lie down in the bed of my dead love, dead myself. In some little, unseen cleft a shadow exhausts itself to zero, evening assumes a most radiant black. Night’s face sits adoring an emptiness, a thick, blackening bone with no marrow. Her sunlight, zoomed now to eternity, lies fixed in a black hole of memory. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2008-09-05 17:33:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
A more honest voice never haunted these grounds. I suspect you've never written a line of bullshit. I know, just as Italians know pasta - if I may be forgiven for comparing my beloved pasta to bullshit.
Forgive me for not critiquing this when it mattered.
May it bring you forth now.
Your friend, ever,
MSS