This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2008-06-04 20:49:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Good Night

place the tired head upon the pillow make the back a weeping willow curl up the knees to the chin breathe deep, relax, we shall begin I said good night a dance in sleep the eyes move quite in a sleep and perchance, a dream takes winged flight come sail away into a stormed eye,  so high, or so deep, that we seek, by and by in seeking so it finds the time away from the mind this time in shift by subtle design this time you'll see all the signs and dreams are playing here at rainy night what are they saying in their astral flight? my love my love be loved beneath, between, behind, above be loved, be loved, be loved good night my love good night good night good night good night my love I'll meet you in your fragile flight and when the morning dew awake encrusted in the eye aflake feel refreshed and mind alive another day of loving arrived

Copyright © June 2008 Regis L Chapman

Additional Notes:
I wrote this as a good night to my love, Leila, about whom I am sure you can see, I am fond of. We are having really amazing astral body exchanges and impacts upon each other's dreams, and so on. Even though separated by a thousand miles, it often feels I am right there with her. She feels like this also, and has awoken recently spending some minutes thinking I am actually physically present with her. So we are very connected even in subtle ways- we have good and bad days together and many small things too. This was a good night to her in this mindset. Thanks, Regis


This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-07-06 15:25:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Regis, This poem flows along flawlessly, lovely, and uniquely. I've never ever imagined two could be as one in a dream. This is very fresh as a perspective. I like your rhyme keeping it all going.' I like 'the time away from the mind' very good descriptive wording..... great job! Dellena


This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-06-30 14:34:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Regis...Love poem are so difficult to write as so much has already been written about it. This poem is unique and certainly has a different point of view on the subject. Strophe five and six I think is redundant with the repetition 'my love' and 'goodnight my love' I think one statement would be sufficient to get your point across. Your last strophe I think is the best and most powerful. Outside of these two nits I think this is a nice love poem and I bet Leila thinks so too! Marilyn
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