This Poem was Submitted By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-07-08 17:20:51 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Spring Mendings

Sharp golden fragments spill across the earth, white frost has given up its crystal tooth. Disheveled flower beds awake from dreams and spring will mend the scars that winter wrought. All bulbs eternal promise echoes birth, with breath before the twilight mantle falls. A silent pulse of wind will flutter ponds while swollen clouds in moody skies will tip, then drop their rain like fragile beads of glass. The trees remember their cloaks of green and dance, delight the breeze that sweeps the mist away and spring will mend the garden’s dress of rags. The noiseless wings excite and brush the air, as throaty warbles blend in opera’s song. The perished rose in winter’s chill and gloom will blush content with thorn in fragrant skies. Delightful sounds of arias hold their notes and mending spring will cast her wrap of frills.

Copyright © July 2008 marilyn terwilleger

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-08-02 16:45:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88889
Marilyn, I'm a spring person, so I like mending the garden after winter. Renewal is great after winter's introspection. This could pertain to all of us. Re-starting, cleaning up, beginning anew. I like the crystal tooth, rain as beads of glass...... Nice. Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2008-07-28 15:16:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
As lush in word as spring is in unfoldment. I like the humanization of the trees, flowers, wind, breeze and their clothing, activities, and expressions as a mechanism to relate to them in this most precious of times. Especially the vision I had of the clouds tipping themselves like a serving of tea. Very beautiful and heartfelt work. Om, Regis
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-07-10 23:12:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
How lovely a picture you have brushed with the stroke of your pen.....words that bring to life the earth after a long winter's nap.......enjoyed it all from beginning to most favorite time of the year is Spring and for the reasons stated within your lines....especially enjoyed spring will mend the garden's dress of rags.......just like Cinderella going to the ball.......beautifully done......mending spring will cast her wrap of frills...... A silent pulse of wind will flutter can see the silent pulse of wind and at the same time feel the ponds flutter........ while swollen clouds in moody skies will tip, then drop their rain like fragile beads of glass. So much beauty in this swollen cloud with their fragile beads of glass........well by now I do hope you know how much I have enjoyed this one and it will make my list of favorites......thanks for sharing once again your God given talent......God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-07-10 02:27:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ah Marilyn, This will probably sound like fluff but what the heck. This is simply delicous in all that it offers from pov to the words you've used as discriptors. The gentle flow carried this reader through without a stumble, lyrical and pleasant it was to the ear. Very enjoyable, left a lingering pleasure in the mind. Lora
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