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My Love... When you come home I'll meet you outside And I'll open your door I'll carry you Up the front steps Across the living room floor Straight to the bathroom Where I've drawn you up A hot bubble bath Candles all aglow Music soft and slow Baby and after that... I'll sit you down And take your shoes off Then I'll roll down those hose I'll rub your feet And play with every single One of your toes I'll work my way up Slow and sure You got me down on my knees Gonna do it like a man Sweet kisses soft hands You whisper "baby please"... I'll wash your back I'll wash your front And everywhere in between I'll smooth your rough spots With massages Pat you down nice and clean Then I'll take you To the bedroom Give you lovin so strong Waking neighbors in the rain Hear you saying my name "Give me love daddy all night long..." |
Additional Notes:
The rhythm of this piece is set loosely to a late-80's R&B song by Karen White titled "Superwoman". This one is meant to be sung. Tones start low and rise an octave every 3-line verse until peaking on the last line of each stanza then repeating the process. And you gotta draw out that last line in each stanza. Anyone know how to get lyrics to Bobby Brown?--lol.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2008-09-06 11:26:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Charles,
I can honestly say I've never met a man like this. Perhaps in my dreams, not in reality. If a man; can feel these feelings than is heart is pure, loving, sensual and giving. Very good write. Easy to read, and follow through. Adoration comes to mind - that of someone who realizes the beauty in a woman; respects them and
pleases them as well as themselves in the process.
Nicely done.
Denimari