This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2008-09-13 22:44:05 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Venting Outloud

A sucker; happy every day through This world, Where we're surrounded daily by the ugliness that floats in the air. Emotions change often; The happy people who look happy; all the time are weird. Their masks are transparent;  Phony faces make me feel sick. Damn show your emotions - and voice your opinions always. Instead of conforming to what you think is appropriate, Stand up, be true to who you are; and what you think. Bust out of the mold; of the brainwashing you've encountered. Trained to be..... Taught to be..... Pulled behind the the trains of life, Not even trying to think for yourself. Or question, doubt, or defy what people tell you, I've got to go; deep, down, in and out now. With the winds of forceful thinking  Pushing me to new concepts and ideas,  Far over the lines of who I was before. Happy every day, every minute is too left. I want to be right, write and say To hell with the empty headed  blind assholes -  who don't  feel any emotion except for  being happy in  a  world that  is  crumbling to  pieces  under  their stupid little feet.

Copyright © September 2008 DeniMari Z.

Additional Notes:
No need to critique this because I'm using up credits, it's just self-expression that I'd like to put into a beautiful poem - with deeper meaning.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2008-09-17 22:59:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deni, No need to critique or not, thank you---so glad to see someone vent, I enjoyed the read and emphasized with you... Lora


This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2008-09-17 17:30:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
when you vent you vent, when you express you do that so well.......a form of self expression that more of us should perhaps try......hope this finds you well poet, keep the pen flowing and your heart full of love. God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2008-09-16 16:26:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.80000
Hi Deni....Sometimes it is good just to rant, rave and vent....oddly enough it can be soothing. This is one of those poem that is not easily forgotten. I am sure we have all felt this way at one time or another. It's better to write down our feelings than to run amock! (just kidding) Hang in there, only one way to go and that's up....hugs....M.
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2008-09-14 02:35:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Well, my dear, let's see what we can do here...got my check list out (going to make a rudimentary examination over your protests.) 1) You have something to say POIGNATELY Check 2) Refreshingly honest and penetrating Check 3) True to your feelings Check 4) Interestingly phrased Check 5) Universal interest Check 6) Strikes a chord with all suffering lossCheck Works into my esteem, just don't take it to a shrink. Ran out of gold stars. Would you settle for a candy kiss? JCH
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