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Broken Bridge Mankind, loosely lives reasoning that life is forever and a day. Trusting promise of tomorrow; will be just as the sun rises endlessly. Our amount of time is never clearly defined. Illusion takes over common sense. Some dwell in cloddish tents, centered on the hollow they follow. Living life; gathering reverse conclusions, To appease what ever notion they please. My notes spread out on years, to determine self; purpose more are how to succeed with growing outwards, onward with higher peceptions to rock flimsy elementary foundations taught to me by bloody fools looking for conformity. My hands are waving as my thoughts protest such notions being concrete. Spin me around a few times in wonderland So I can find out who; and where and what I am. I'll make a splash, into their private beach or puddle to pull up the stakes of their tents. My desire in life today is to stimulate; more believable common sense. |
Additional Notes:
Guess I'm on a kick this week - Life....and people - why is so much of it tunnel vision, taught beliefs, and
follow the leader off the broken bridge these days........?????
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2008-10-03 22:44:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DeniMari,
I love your thoughts on self discovery.
It is a very scary expedition you are on.
I'm a very outspoken person/always saying what I know and learn on my soapbox.
I find that people feel safe in their tunnel vision. Nothing is a frightening challenge to face whoich
makes existence simple and shallow.
Because of your life's circumstance you were forced to grow.You could have backed away but you
are too intellegent too strong to be frightened off.
Good for you. All is not what you think it is, and you may become shocked......but never deter
from the quest for knowledge. It will be your power.
Your poem is inspirational.......continue......
Dellena
Spin me around a few times in wonderland
So I can find out who; and where and what I
am. [I like this part a lot]