This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-01-03 11:35:58 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Child Abuse Poised to fly, wings alift
slight bough humming
In uncertain release
tiny heart strumming
Dip, then fall...
hope no cat's around
Child sparrow, swift taker
wistful courage
Yet untaught cowardice
perching on ledge
To release into wonder
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Copyright © January 2009 James C. Horak
Additional Notes:
It is sometimes more what we do not provide than what we do.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-01-28 16:26:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James,
Sounds like cupid's arrow humming, strumming, releasing children of birds.
Maybe the push to fly gives us courage.
Something humans don't often teach their young.
Releasing to wonder or perhaps 'terror' today.
We as parents and a people wish to control every facet of life. Their partner, child, parents, family.
It is difficult to let another live their fate.
Good stuff, James.
You always keep me thinking.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-01-17 21:35:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi James,
The image of the sparrow, rising above the sufferings is stark. The resounding echos of courage ring loud and clear in this piece of hope and light. A strong message on Child abuse.
Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2009-01-11 11:47:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Love your way with words, your presentation and your style.......this one is no exception and will make my list for the month. You have penned well my friend, you have created images that I might have laughed at and even cried at.........My dog, Pretty Girl, just woofed at me the other morning to call DSS on 'daddy' for she is tired of his putting her out when she barks too long........any suggestions......Cold day here in New England, new snowfall overnight and this morning, stay warm, God Bless, Claire
Oh and I am certain the sparrow made a wonderful first flight......
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2009-01-09 07:40:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Wow James! If I had a vocabulary as great as yours, along with your wonderful imagination and the talent you do in penning it all together.......I can only wish. I do truly enjoy reading your work and try real hard to figure you out sometimes, but always enjoy it.
Always,
Rene'
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