This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2009-02-13 10:35:32 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Meaningful Mush My love does soar
a direct connection
to our very first day
My heart does sing
a daily verse
of unwavering melody
My soul is fulfilled
each time
my eyes open to her
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Copyright © February 2009 Kenneth R. Patton
Additional Notes:
For Kim, my love
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-02-25 19:58:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Kenneth,
Gentle and sincere, and direct.
You care, you say, you share, I'm glad.
Love is hope and quite necessary to exist.
Meaningful, yes, mush, not. I'd love another word.....'Heart Talk"
"Because of Kim", "Meaningful Sentiment"
Mush works but isn't very classy, [if you care]
Good job.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rene L Bennett On Date: 2009-02-19 08:02:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Kenneth,
Short but effective. Beautiful love poem. Could be a Hallmark verse.
Rene'
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-02-15 00:02:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Kenneth,
This peice certainly sets the mood for Valentine's day. I appreciate your reflection on this universal feeling we call love...may it tocuh more souls in this world of hate.
Duane.
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