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This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-07-19 08:24:28 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Anti-Mundane

When the hand stilled to steady The coffee pour like intended fall Plunging torrents broken to peace Below upon rocks While nothing fails to matter That has duration

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-08-03 18:13:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James , Your word peace had me thinking about our countries trials. If we hold strong as rocks, we can handle the torrents. Strong minded unafraid as people, pulling together with duration, it will maybe make a difference. America is the insurgent in everybody's country. Peace need be ours. Good! Dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-07-28 23:11:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi James, I'm in a mood to attach a sense of symbolism to everything I come across and tie it in with a spiritual feel on another level though your last lines - "nothing fails to matter that has duration" is so apt even in everyday living. And while it might not be intended I'm led to think of the Middle East as I read this. The hand that steadies itself to deliver lasting peace (note pun on piece) ...the allusion to the Dome of The Rock (contentious in brokering a 'lasting' 'durable' peace between Palestine and Israel). Certainly, the 'comical', 'tenuous' and 'temporary' peace manouveurs between the two sides wont and will never matter UNLESS a visionary leader with a steady hand makes it DURABLE. Wow, I hope I haven't rambled in this interpretation but I thought you'd find it interesting that your poem speaks on that level too. I enjoyed this read thoroguhly. It is immensely relevant and as always, well written. Duane.

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-07-26 13:24:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very profound JC - the last verse is true; something I never gave thought to until reading this poem. How can anything that lasts fail? The structure is laid out nicely on the page - and the title you gave this poem is what caught my eye. Enjoyed the imagery use of "plunging torrents broken to peace", as it stands out in your first verse. Def more than a mundane write; blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas H. Smihula On Date: 2009-07-20 09:52:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James, Can see the hand stirring then completion and destruction upon waking up to what has been finished. A duration in time is what I liked most about this piece. Thanks for sharing.

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