This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2009-09-16 02:00:42 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Night Sky

No clouds precede or presage me but we arise, each other's sun. Wide under me, your eyes give birth  to stars. This is no mimickry or thaumaturgy of a soul: my words spell the unmarked marriage of you to you, your apogee to the lost bottom of your well. Go out again and, please, come back for me if you don't find me here but rid of words, those deafening lights whose radiance is constant black. The comet that divides my sky does not divide the universe so much as fact from fantasy: it marks the opening of my eye.

Copyright © September 2009 Mark Andrew Hislop


This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-10-04 16:07:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
That in intimacy are many things more than grasping lust is beautifully appreciated by this poem. You've grown self-exploration here into connection with others, no more noble thing. The last verse has a profundity that is at once gentle as falling leaves, and then striking as shaking earth. For my own part, this poem will not go ignored. JCH


This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2009-09-18 12:17:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
MAH, Solid. I love powerful metaphor, and look to that in top shelf stuff. Along with that intangible, "atmosphere." "Arrow," and this one, have both. Starting to hit your stride I'd say. Now it's just a matter of covering the ground. MSS
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-09-16 23:07:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mark, Beautiful work. The image works well with the power of love. My favorite of yours from the others you have posted this month...so far. Also want to take the opp to express my agreement with the idea of not publishing votes on the mai site. I can see where you are coming from. The trouble is, I'm unable to log into the forum and have tried intimating Chris about this...to no avail. Duane.
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