This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2009-12-21 08:13:12 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Proved Once Again I entered the hall
scanning for a place to sit
The usual tables
and metal folding chairs
I spied a few open
with padded seats
and moved towards one
with some satisfaction
Upon sitting I realised
it was bent and slanted
and not quite
the comfort I had supposed
Proving once again
that soft and cushy
is not always
the smart choice |
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Copyright © December 2009 Kenneth R. Patton
Additional Notes:
For what it's worth
Thanks Duane and James
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2009-12-28 15:39:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Aha! Good imagery. Simple and straightforward. I like the ending. For what its worth? It's great. Everyone will relate to this, Smiles, Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-12-27 21:24:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Kenneth,
I have learned, [always the hard way]
that the easiest/cushiest choice is not the happiest way.
Some times a rock hard seat is more appreciated.
Your poem can mean many things.
A wrong partner, wrong judgment, wrong chair.
I like the seat example.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-12-25 00:37:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very good Ken,
What looks good at first sight, sometimes holds unseen flaws until we try it on for size,
peace & blessings,
Deni
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