This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-02-04 14:36:47 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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The Gloved One Once cozy at the tips
Gloves I'd worn for years
Secure at the wrist
Warm, pleasurable,
Easy and satisfying
Ones that fit exactly
Gloves I'd worn for years
Now they're confining
Weathered, constricted,
Unworkable and trying
Wonderful turned to grim
Gloves I'd worn for years
Gradually had changed
Purposeful to faulted
Perfect now annoying
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Copyright © February 2010 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: Terry A On Date: 2010-02-25 17:28:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Dellena,
This poem reads so smooth, as though it rolled off your pen in one easy write. Even if that was not the case, it is a sign of good poetic craft to be able to make it appear that way. Something so simple as gloves, you've imbued with rich symbolic and metaphoric meaning. Meaning that encompasses almost anything that has had its time, that fit, and now doesn't. Sounds like the refrains that would fit most divorce courts, at least among the more thinking and charitable. Things change, inevitably and though not always as your poem portrays, you've grounded your meaning by choosing something that is specific to represent what kind of change you show.
This poem is very accomplished by its strict attention to rhythm and maximizing meaning by every single word.
I remember I thought similar about your poem about socks. You have a deep poetic wardrobe going on there, and very thought full of meaning.
Terry
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2010-02-20 21:37:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Dellena,
Deeper than just a pair of gloves that dont fit too well, this poem speaks on so many layers. For me, the thought emanating is that of transition and how life throws us out of our comfort zones more often than not. The repetion of 'gloves i'd worn for years' works here as a constant reminder that its all the same..but the wisdom of it all is that its us who change as masters of our circumstances
Nice.
Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2010-02-10 22:08:43
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Sounds like my ex-wife.
This is well-constructed and full of chocolate chips.
I like the "W's" "warm, weathered, wonderful"
Gradually...guh.
Take care, D.
Tom
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-02-09 11:06:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Nice work Dellena - concise - structured verses; a look back to what was comfortable, and now has changed.
You've chose the "glove", to relate to the whole meaning of this poem. The poem reads well, but I did hesitate at the last line as you ended it with annoying - they may be annoying; but to me (just my personal opinion) it takes away from the last verse.
Otherwise, a poem to be counted, and added to my list,
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2010-02-06 14:08:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Like Whirligig, you strike profoundly euphemism in parallel with something else;
in this case, aging. The choice of gloves, over shoes, coats, pants,etc. is very
interesting and has its own meanings. I'm quite taken with that...as well as with
the beautiful simplicity with which you make this poem work so successfully. You
know how fond I am of subtle, uncontrived rhyme and "tips" with "wrist", "grim"
with "years", and "faulted" with "annoying" appeal to me greatly. Although, I'm
certain, those ear-hardened to the less-than-subtle wouldn't notice at all. Their
loss.
Aside, you are very generous in your offer to help jumpstart a cash prize tradition
somewhat by contributing monies yourself. If you like, you might post your ideas
on that to the forum and see if others would like to get involved. Maybe we could
concrete some form of system wherein everyone contributes what they can afford.
If everyone likes the way I've run this contest, then I would be available and
willing to run others. But that can be done by others too. At least I've helped
demonstrate it makes a difference.
We don't just have more poems, we have better ones.
JCH
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