This Poem was Submitted By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-03-13 20:21:11 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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My Vacation I want to visit somewhere
In the middle of nowhere
Where nothing means everything
I'm nowhere seeing nothing
Because anything could be something
And I want everything to be nothing
All of nothingness for me
Naught of anything left for you
So there's something for everyone else
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Copyright © March 2010 Dellena Rovito
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-03-31 15:16:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
My Vacation
I want to visit somewhere – Great line, leaves open interpretation
In the middle of nowhere – see line one. I am caught and ready for the punchline
Where nothing means everything – Bravo!! What a great first stanza!!
I'm nowhere seeing nothing – Mirror of line two, we are still there with you
Because anything could be something – Mirror of line three, answers for the soul
And I want everything to be nothing - the jusxtoposition of nothing and everything- S1L3, if “nothing means everything†then S2L3 if “everything is nothingâ€, then it is fulfilling prophecy.
Great irony involved in this line.
All of nothingness for me – A personal reflection, of worth or desires? It speaks of the writer
Naught of anything left for you – “nothiness†left, for nothing gained.
So there's something for everyone else – “everyone else†can have anything (S2L2), or nothing at all.
A wonderfully fun, run around the maypole with the dire images of souls in chase.
Excellent
This Poem was Critiqued By: Terry A On Date: 2010-03-22 02:07:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I've realized that TEW understands,"The nothing that is not there and the nothing that is."; and so I was kinda hoping he'd critique this cool poem of yours first, because for the life of me, it seemed like a new kind of advanced physics. I finally had to consult Mr. Nothrop Frye, who point-blank explained it to me:
"Literature: where things neither exist nor do not exist and where an airy nothing is confidently located or named."
A poem. A vacation of the imagination. No metaphor can exist without imagination.
Hope I'm close. Hope you're well.
Terry
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-03-15 13:18:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Questions, we all have so many in life don't we? I like your poem, but the I think less words ending in "ing", would have made it a better read.
The message is good, the calm of nothing but gratifying to be there - how peaceful that would be. For me it's sleep, so there I am in the middle of nowhere thank God.
Second verse, a further longing to get the static out of life, and just live -
Humourous, yet thought provoking ending - you have your everything, Something left for "us", and anything for everyone else.
It's a good play on words, now I see why you used the words ending in "Ing", to bring the message out.
Very unique if I'm right about the poem.
blessings,
Deni
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