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Last Dance With the Devil in Hell

Bella Mi The lake of passion still sees the swans neck stretched in delight. Dream chasing towards purpose a mark of respect is left behind. Naught was lost on wet grassy banks where life gently slid, unfeeling days and vile nights where ghosts circled round to host hazy minds inviting enticing sleep in many months of no relief. Bella Mi Waited with a sway to pass through nights into genuine rest fostering plans for the cranky spit men would throw at her face in the morn. Sleep comes to those sated by life,  never to those who are torn. Eyes see but not through clarity how to close off the entrance of pain. Bitterly poisoned by lakes covered with rain  a cross, a heavy cross she fell upon for mercy to keep her afloat  above murky shaded waters mortified breath, which could easily have embalmed the pain to a final death. Bella Mi God isn’t the enemy who has marched hell over life to condemn with a permanent scar. It is the peaceful visits in air that surround a soul nourished through battles nearly massacred by hands still digging out dirt from raw deep cuts. Bella Mi Unarranged and forced upon a fight for life, to strip back down and rise with light or never smile through Satans laughter from hell stab him in his back then show yourself well. Bella Mi As pride is to prize this war has ended in favor all demons, enemies, and captured ghosts in the lot have died. As the last dance with the devil begins my quaint defense is pure love the music in mind tunes out all  but subline at a last, ever lasting chance as God taps his shoulder and takes both of my hands.

Copyright © April 2010 DeniMari Z.


This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-04-15 14:29:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Deni, This is a stunning poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once. You have made excellent word choices and the lines flow down the page with ease. Also you have written a plethora of extraordinary phrases that roll of the tongue like liquid. An ambitious poem that is both well written and evocative. Well done, bravo! Best wishes, cheyenne


This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2010-04-13 18:03:06
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi DeniMari, A great realization you showed us in this. Light should prevail against darkness. My favorite part is the ending. It gives me an inspiration and hope. I was absent from TPL for so long and this makes me long to come back more often. Thanks for the treat. Thanks, Jordan
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-04-08 17:00:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deni, What an excellent poem. Triumphant in the end as always holding fast to faith knowing that God will enterceede and will keep you as his own as he always has. Yes, how would bliss be recognized without the agony that comes before. Your verbiage is most enjoyable and rushs reader through will a high count of emotion to lay gentle in his hands in the fini. The cadence, flow danced your reader through the poem and even in sudders chill at places, the need to continue was greater than the shudder. Thanks for a strongly written poem with much to ponder and to agree upon. TC--L
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